【课件】高中英语读后续写方法指导课件

读后续写评分原则：1）内容：内容的丰富性、故事发展的合理性，续写的完整性2）词汇语法：使用语言的多样性、准确性和恰当性；（语言为交际服务，不可一味使用所谓“高级”语言，要与原文语言特点保持一致。）3）篇章结构：上下文的衔接（包括续写段落之间的衔接）连贯性；4）写作规范：①词数少于130的，扣2分；②拼写和标点符号错误多将分数降低一个档次；③如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次；写作步骤：“四步答题法”。阅读—拟稿—润色—成稿。Step1阅读，理清故事情节，找出5W+1How。画出关键词，预测后续故事1.Makesenseofthemainplotsofthepassange.2.Analyzethetwogivensentencesandunderlinekeywordstopredictwhatistofollow.Step2拟稿DraftWorkoutanoutlineStep3Polish润色1.Usethekeywordsandphrasesinthepassange.2.Usedifferentsentencestructures.1．句式要有变化①复合句(主语\宾语\表语\同谓语\定语\状语从句)②倒装句（1）否定词置于句首（2）only+状语置于句首③强调句型Itis……that(who)…④固定句子结构too…to…so…that…not…until…notonly…butalso…neither…nor…2．要使用高级词汇及短语①使用高等级词汇Heisagoodstudent.excellent\extraordinary②使用短语Ilikemusic.befondof\beinterestedin③使用谚语Asthesayinggoes,“......”Itgoeswithoutsayingthatwecannotbeyoungforever.（适用于自编名言）并列选择原因结果比较转折递进举例3.使用连接词，过渡自然，连贯通顺，and;aswellas;also;too,or;either—or;because(of);owingto;dueto;thankstoso;therefore;thus;asaresultonthecontrary;comparedto…,but;yet;however;besides;moreover;inadditionforexample;suchas;thatis;take…forexampleCheckwhethertheverbformsandwordsspellingiscorrect.Step4Present(成稿）Producethefinalwork.读后续写讲评读后续写（满分25分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Jennywastheonlychildinherhome.Shehadaquarrel(争吵)withhermotherthatafternoonandranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn'thelpcryingwhenshethoughtofthescolding(责骂)fromhermother.Gettingaroundaimlesslyinthestreetforhours，shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastand(货摊)forawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedmanbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shehadtoleave.ThemanbehindthestandnoticedJennyandasked,“Hey,doyouwanttohavethenoodles？”“Oh,yes,butIdon'thavemoney.”shereplied.“I'lltreatyoutoday,”saidtheman.Hebroughtherabowlofnoodles,thesmellsoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently. “Whatisit?” askedthemankindly.“ActuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!” saidJennyasshewipedhertears.“Evenastrangerwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.”Hearingthewords,themansmiled,“Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodles.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourthankfulnesstoher？”Jennysatthere,speechless；sherememberedhermother'sfamiliarface.“Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelgrateful(感激的).Whyhaven'tIthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme?”Onthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapology(道歉)tohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.Paragraph1：Approaching the doorway,Jenny took a deep breath._________________________________________Paragraph2：A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.___________________________________________Howdidshefeel?whatdidshedo?WhatdidJennydobeforehermothercameback?Whatwouldshedo?第一步，迅速获取故事情节（5W+1H)1.Who:Jenny,mother,astranger2.When:oneafternoon3.Where:3.What:quarrelwithhermother,astrangergaveherabowlofnoodelswhenshewashungry.4.Why:thestranger'swordremindedJennyofwhathermotherhaddone.5.How:Jennyfeltregretfulanddecidedtomakeanapology.第二步，理清人物情感变化。第二步，理清人物情感变化StorylineHowdidJennyfeelabouthermother?Beginning:quarrelled,ranout(para1)angryDevelopment:astranger,abowlofnoodles(para2)meanandcruelClimax:Stranger'swords,mother'slove(para3&4)regretfulandgratefulLaterdevelopment:wenthome(para5)??Paragraph1Approachingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.Whensheknockedatthedoor,shefoundthedoorwaslockedandhermotherwasnotin.Tiredandsad,shesatdowninfrontofthehouse.“Wherecouldmymotherbe?”shewondered,“Wasshestillangrywithme?”Again,thesceneofthequarrelappearedinhermind.Sherememberedherrudenesstohermother.Realizingthatallthescoldingfromhermotherwasduetothefactthathermotherreallycaredalotabouther,shefeltratherashamed,andtearsbegantorolldownhercheeks.Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.Sheraisedherheadandsawthefamiliarfaceofhermother.“Hereyoucome!I'vebeenlookingforyou,”shesaid,tiredandrelieved.Jennycouldn'thelpthrowingherselfintohermother'sarms.“Mum,I'msosorryandthankyouforallyouhavedoneforme.”Sheexpressedhersincereapologyandgreatgratitude.Hearingthis,hermothersmiled,pattingherbackgently.重点单词和短语scene场景quarrel吵架rudeness粗鲁raise抬起tookadeepbreath深呼吸knockat敲门beangrywith对...生气dueto因为caredalotabout非常关心be/feltratherashamed感到很羞愧rolldown滚下couldn'thelpdong情不自禁做...throwingoneselfintosb'sarms投入某人的怀抱expressgreatgratitude表达感激亮点句型1.Tiredandsad,shesatdowninfrontofthehouse.（形容词短语作原因状语）2.Realizingthatallthescoldingfromhermotherwasduetothefactthathermotherreallycaredalotabouther,shefeltratherashamed,andtearsbegantorolldownhercheeks.（v-ing作时间状语，第一个that引导宾语从句，第二个That引导定语从句）3.“Hereyoucome!I'vebeenlookingforyou,”shesaid,tiredandrelieved.(作伴随状语）4.Hearingthis,hermothersmiled,pattingherbackgently.（V-ing作时间状语，第二个V-ing作伴随状语）Paragraph1Approachingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.Shefeltalittlenervous,butsheopenedthedooratlast.“Mom,mom.”Shesaidweakly.However,nobodyanswered.Shecouldn'tfindhermotheranywhereathome.Shethought：“Mymotherhadleftme!”Atthattime,shecouldn'thelpcrying.Shethoughtofthethingshermotherdidforher.forexample,hermothercookedforher,lookedafterher,washedherclothesandsoon.Sheregrettedverymuchnow.Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.“Oh!Mybaby,youhadcomeback.Iwentouttofindyou.Areyoucrying?Whathappened?”Hermothersaid.Shelookedatthefamiliarfaceandsmiled.Shehuggedhermotherandsaid:“Mom,I'msosorry.Ishouldmakeanapologyformyrudenesstoyou.Ishouldn'tquarrelwithyou.Mom.Iloveyou.Thanksforallthethingsyoudidforme.”“I'mveryhappythatyoucanunderstandme.Mydear,Iloveyouforever.”Hermothersaidwarmly.Onthatafternoon,shegrewup.重点单词和短语weaklyregrethugcouldn’thelpmakeanapologyforgrowup亮点句型1.Shefeltalittlenervous,butsheopenedthedooratlast.（but连接的并列句）2.Shethoughtofthethingshermotherdidforher.（省略that的定语从句）3.I'mveryhappythatyoucanunderstandme（Be+表情感的adj+that宾语从句）课堂练习第二节　读后续写阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。MybrotherandIwerealoneathomebecausemyparentshadgoneforameetingandtheyhadleftmeincharge.IwasdoingmyhomeworkwhilemyyoungerbrotherwaswatchingTV.Suddenlythedoorbellrang.Myyoungerbrotherrushedtothedoorthinkingthatourparentshadcomehome;heunlockedthedoorandopenedit.Outsidestoodatallmanwearingablackraincoatandblackrubberboots.HesaidhewasasalesmanandaskedpolitelyifourmotherorfatherwasathomeWithoutthinking,mybrothersaid:“No.”Heaskedifwewouldliketobuysomecomicbookswhichhewasselling.Iquicklyexplainedthatwewerenotsupposedtobuyanythingwithoutourparents’permission.Then,asIwasabouttoclosethedoor,heforcedhiswayintoourhouse.Hetookoutaknifeandforcedmetotieupmybrother’shandswithsomeropewhichhetookoutfromhispocket.Itieduphishandsbuttiedtheminaspecialwaysomybrothercoulduntiehimself.Themanthentiedmyhandsupandlockedbothofusinthekitchen.Soon,hewentupstairstosearchthebedroomforvaluables.Imanagedtoteachmybrothertountietheropeonhishands.Hethenuntiedme.Irushedtothetelephonetocallthepolice,butthelinewasdead.Onepossibleversion:Thedoorswerealllockedfromtheoutsideandwhatwasworse,Ididnothavethekeys.Butluckily,themanforgottolockthekitchenwindow.BothmybrotherandImanagedtogetoutofthehousethroughthewindowandwerantothenearbypolicestationandaskedthemforhelp.Thepolicearrivedatourhouseassoonaspossible.Andasaresult,themanwascaught.Justatthesametimeourparentscamebackhome.Thepoliceaskedmyfamilytogotothepolicestation.Itwasattherethatthepolicetoldusthemanwasawantedrobberpretendingtosellcomicbooksandthattheyhadbeenlookingforhimforalongtime.Thepolicepraisedmybrotherandmeforourbravebehaviour.Afterwewentbackhome,Itoldmyparentsthewholestoryabouttherobbery.Theywerethankfulthatwewerenothurtbuttheyscoldedmefornotstoppingmybrotherfromopeningthedoortostrangers.Ilearnedalessononsafetyandresponsibility.