【读后续写课件】读后续写讲评课

ContinuationWriting读后续写讲评课考情 分析 定性数据统计分析pdf销售业绩分析模板建筑结构震害分析销售进度分析表京东商城竞争战略分析 1.能基本读懂 故事 滥竽充数故事班主任管理故事5分钟二年级语文看图讲故事传统美德小故事50字120个国学经典故事ppt ，2.对原文分析不够具体到位3.写作句式简单，描写生硬教学目标通过故事山分析原文本的基本框架，分析出故事要素（人物，时间，地点，事件），分析出人物关系，环境，情节发展，并作出合理预测。通过搭建脚手架，提供语料，使学生能够用正确合适的语言合理续写故事。如何构思续写的 内容 财务内部控制制度的内容财务内部控制制度的内容人员招聘与配置的内容项目成本控制的内容消防安全演练内容 Step1FigureouttheelementsStep2FigureouttheplotsStep3FigureoutthemainideaStep4MakepredictionsThroughourlives,wecangainalotandlosesomuch.Butbeinghonestshouldalwaysbewithus,ashonestyisalwaysregardedasavirtue.EverytimeItalkaboutthetopic,somethingcrowdsinmymindasifithadjusthappened.Iwas16whenonemorning,DadtoldmeIcoulddrivehimtoMijasandthentakethecarinanearbygaragetogetitserviced.Atthattime,Ihadjustpassedthedrivingtest,andIhardlyhadachancetousethecar,soIsaidyeswithouthesitation.IdrovemyfathertoMijas,promisingtopickhimupagainat4pm,thenIwenttoanearbygarage,andputthecarinthere.SinceIhadseveralhourstospare,Idecidedtogotoamovietheaternearthegaragetoseethemovie.However,IwassoabsorbedintheplotofthemoviethatIforgotthetime.Whenthelastmoviefinished,Ilookedatmywatch：6pm.Iwastwohourslate!IthoughtmyfatherwouldbeveryangryifheknewwhatIwasdoing.Andhewouldneverletmedriveagain.SoIdecidedtomakeupanexcuse.Then,Idrovetotheappointedplace,myfatherwassittinginacorner,waitingpatiently.Ifirstapologizedforbeinglate,thentoldhimthatIwantedtogetthereassoonaspossible,butthatsomethingwaswrongwithsomeofthemainpartsofthecar.Iwouldneverforgetthewayhelookedatme.“I'mverydisappointedthatyouthoughtyouhadtolietome,Jason.”Myfatherlookedatmeagainandsaid,“Whenyoudidn'tshowupontime,Icalledthegasstationandaskediftherewasanythingwrong.Theytoldmeyouneverpickedupthecar.So,yousee,Iknowthere'snothingwrongwiththecaratall."Paragaph1:AwaveofguiltsweptovermeandIhadtoadmitthefactthatIhadgonetothemoviesandthatwastherealreasonwhyIwaslate. __________________________________________Paragraph2：Butfather,it'sexactlyeighteenmileshomefromhere,andit'sdark.Youcan'twalkback."Ibegged.__________________________________________阅读分析与续写的框架主题语境：人与社会——亲情Theme:作者驾车去接他的父亲，但是他因为去看电影而耽误了时间后，他谎称去修车了，最后谎言被拆穿了，这使得父亲非常生气。Purpose:通过这次说谎的经历，体现了诚实点重要性。Development:刚拿驾照，父亲允许开车-沉迷电影，忘记时间-匆忙赶到，并说谎-父亲生气Structure:每段8句左右，长短句交错，非谓语动词，状语从句和定语从句多等。WordChoice:常用词为主，否定词加强语气AstorywhenwherewhowhathowwhyReadingforthebasicinformationThemewhenwherewhowhatwhy要素分析：onemorningonthewaytoMijasandhomeI,myfatherIsentmyfathertoMijasbutforgottopickhimup,whichmademyfatherangry.Iwasabsorbedinthefilm,forgotthetimeandliedtomyfather.如何构思续写的内容plotfeelingscharactersWritingpurposeProblemsandsolutionsBeginningBuild-upConflictResolusion123?DadtoldmeIcoulddrivehimtoMijasandthenpickhimat4pm.IwasabsorbedinthefilmthatIforgotthetimeToavoidbeingpunished,Iliedtomydad?StorymoutainBeginningConflictBuild-upResolutionEndingexcitedDadtoldmeIcoulddrivehimtoMijasandthenpickhimat4pmIwasabsorbedinthefilmthatIforgotthetimefrightenedToavoidbeingpunished,IliedtomydadguiltyWhatdiddaddonext?WhatdidIfeel??主要人物语言和行为性格特征IAtthattime,Ihadjustpassedthedrivingtest,andIhardlyhadachancetousethecar,soIsaidyeswithouthesitation.excitedEverytimeItalkaboutthetopic,somethingcrowdsinmymindasifithadjusthappened.regretfulIwassoabsorbedintheplotofthemoviethatIforgotthetime.irresponsibleSoIdecidedtomakeupanexcusedishonest主要人物语言和行为性格特征Myfathermyfatherwassittinginacorner,waitingpatiently.tolerant“I'mverydisappointedthatyouthoughtyouhadtolietome,Jason.”disappointed“Whenyoudidn'tshowupontime,Icalledthegasstationandaskediftherewasanythingwrong.Theytoldmeyouneverpickedupthecar.So,yousee,Iknowthere'snothingwrongwiththecaratall."sensiblemethodicalMainidea作者驾车去接他的父亲，但是他因为去看电影而耽误了时间后，他谎称去修车了，最后谎言被拆穿了，这使得父亲非常生气。Makeprediction父亲对我这么做的反应是什么以及我的心里活动是什么以及我从这件事情当中得到了什么经验教训。Paragaph1:AwaveofguiltsweptovermeandIhadtoadmitthefactthatIhadgonetothemoviesandthatwastherealreasonwhyIwaslate. ___________________Paragraph2：Butfather,it'sexactlyeighteenmileshomefromhere,andit'sdark.Youcan'twalkback."Ibegged.________________________MakepredictionsInferthedevelopmentfromthegivensentencesTime:it'slatePlace:farawayfromhomeFeeling:guiltyFeeling:moreguiltyParagaph1:AwaveofguiltsweptovermeandIhadtoadmitthefactthatIhadgonetothemoviesandthatwastherealreasonwhyIwaslate. ___________________InferringthedevelopmentRaisequestionsaboutthedevelopment1.Whatwasfather'sactionnext?2.Howdidfatherfeel?Paragraph2：Butfather,it'sexactlyeighteenmileshomefromhere,andit'sdark.Youcan'twalkback."Ibegged.________________________InferringthedevelopmentRaisequestionsaboutthedevelopmentDidfatherwalkhome?Ifyes/not,whatdidIdonext?3.WhatdidIfeel?Writingbasedontheoutlineandusingsentencepatterns.情感描写的表达动作描写合理的细节描写分解动作，使动作过程化、具体化羞愧Languagedatabasefordescriptions1.Mythroatwasdryandmyfacewasburningup.2.SoashamedwasIthatIcouldfeelmyfaceburning/thebloodrushtomyface.3.Idroppedmyeyes.LanguagedatabasefordescriptionsEmotionallanguages：Disappointed/frustratedOvercomewith/bymybitterdisappointment,myheartsank.inlowspirits\inanunpleasantmoodIfeellikeallmyinsideshavebeendrainedoutandIfeelemptyandletdown.Ifeelsad,frustrated,angry,confused,hopelessandhurtallatthesametime.关于诚信的谚语欺人只能一时，而诚信才是长久之策Decevingotherscanonlytemporarily,buthonestyislong.诚实是最好的准则Hoenstyisthebestpolicy.一诺千金Promiseisdebt.改过不嫌晚It'snevetoolatetomend.AwaveofguiltsweptovermeandIhadtoadmitthefactthatIhadgonetothemoviesandthatwastherealreasonwhyIwaslate.Dadlistenedcarefullyasasadnesspassedthroughhim，“I'mangry,notwithyoubutwithmyself.Yousee.IrealizethatIhavefailedasafatherifafteralltheseyearsyoufeelthatyouhavetolietome.IhavefailedbecauseIhavebroughtupasonwhocannoteventellthetruthtohisownfather.I'mgoingtowalkhomenowandthinkwhereIhavegonewrongalltheseyears”.sampleButfather,it'sexactlyeighteenmileshomefromhere,andit'sdark.Youcan'twalkback."Ibegged.Myprotests,myapologiesandtherestofmywordswereuseless.Ihadletmyfatherdown.andIwasabouttolearnoneofthemostpainfullessonsofmylife.Dadbeganwalkingalongthedustyroads.Iquicklyjumpedinthecarandfollowedbehind.Iapologizedalltheway,tellinghimhowsorryIwas,buthesimplyignoredme.For18mileshekeptwalking.SeeingmyfatherinsomuchpainwasthemostawfulexperiencethatIhaveeverfaced.Howeveritwasalsothemostsuccessfullesson.sample