2022届广东省高三英语一模讲评课件--应用文+读后续写 (仅供参考 请勿外传)

2022届广东一模考试试卷讲评内部交流 资料 新概念英语资料下载李居明饿命改运学pdf成本会计期末资料社会工作导论资料工程结算所需资料清单 ，请勿外传！PART1应用文应用文写作的审题与构思：从命题者，读者，阅卷者三个角度审题，寻找要点和立足点1：先完成应用文的“应用功能”，再完成语言和文化的地道性审题注意以下问题：where，when，why，2what，2how(5W+2H)命题者应用文虚拟的读者阅卷者0102030405审题：Whereandwhenismycompositionused?Whatarethekeypointsandwhy?HowcanIgetmyideaacrosstomyreaders?HowcanIinterestmyreaders?Whatwouldmyreaderswanttoknow?从命题者、读者、阅卷者三个角度审题，寻找要点和立足点三位角度内容写作要求命题者1Whereandwhenismycompositionused?2Whatarethekeypointsandwhy?*确定应用文文体*明确应用文要点读者3Whatwouldmyaudiencewantorneedtoknow?4HowcanIgetmyideaacrosstomyaudience?5HowcanIinterestmyaudience? *拓展真实，“演讲者”角色带入感强，信息符合现实逻辑*逻辑、层次合理，详略得当，重点突出，语义连贯*语气得体，语义连贯，语言生动阅卷者1书写是否清晰2 表 关于同志近三年现实表现材料材料类招标技术评分表图表与交易pdf视力表打印pdf用图表说话 pdf 意是否正确，得体，优美3词汇妥帖，语法无误*语言地道，词汇的丰富，语法的正确性与丰富性应用文写作两大问题1.缺乏真实情景的创造能力(共情能力) A分析和处理应用文要点的能力差（notgoodreaders/listeners） B语言输出能力差where，when，why，2what，2how(5W+2H)2.缺乏良好的英语语言素养 A盲目套用背过的功能句子B缺乏相关主题词汇的积累2022届广东省一模考题从命题者，读者，阅卷者三个角度三位一体审题假定你是李华，正在准备明天英语课堂的“一分钟汇报”。你打算讲述你们小组上周获得学校表彰的研究项目“InterviewingOlderGenerationsaboutTheirLifestyles”，内容包括：1.项目的目的；2.项目成功的经验；3.你的祝愿。注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；2.请在答题卡的相应位置作答。主要内容：项目的目的，成功的经验次要内容：自我介绍，祝愿三位角度内容写作要求命题者1.Whereandwhenismycompositionused?2.Whatarethekeypointsandwhy？演讲稿1.小组研究项目的目的2.获奖项目成功的经验（做法分享）3.你的祝愿读者3.Whatwouldmyreaderswanttoknow?4.HowcanIgetmyideaacrosstomyaudience?5.HowcanIinterestmyaudience?1.读者想知道小组项目的什么信息2.通过介绍能否吸引读者3.拓展真实、角色带入感强，信息符合现实逻辑、层次合理、详略得当、重点突出、语义连贯、客观简练（项目成功的秘诀）、有一定情感（祝愿）阅卷者1.书写是否清晰2.表意是否正确、得体、优美3.词汇妥帖、语法无误语言地道、词汇的准确与丰富、语法正确、语气得体、语义连贯、语言生动应用文高考评分 标准 excel标准偏差excel标准偏差函数exl标准差函数国标检验抽样标准表免费下载红头文件格式标准下载 分值评分标准说明第一档：13-15分完全完成时试题规定的任务。覆盖了所有内容要点；运用了多样丰富的地道和得体的句式与词汇；语法和用词方面有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富内容所致；体现了较强的语言运用能力；有效地使用了语句间连接成分，逻辑清晰合理，所写内容连贯、紧凑，完全达到了预期的写作目的。第二档：10-12分完全完成时试题规定的任务。覆盖了所有内容要点；运用的句式与词汇能满足任务要求；语法和用词方面基本准确、有少许错误，为尽可能表达丰富内容所致；使用了简单句间的连接成分，逻辑清晰合理，所写内容连贯，达到预期的写作目的。第三档：7-9分覆盖了主要内容要点；运用的句式与词汇基本能满足任务要求；语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解；基本达到预期的写作目的。第四档：4-6分未恰当完成试题规定的任务，漏掉或未清楚描述主要内容，所用句式和词汇有限，语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解，未能清楚地传达信息。第五档：1-3分未完成试题规定的任务，明显遗漏主要内容。句式单调、词汇贫乏。语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的理解0分档未能传达任何信息：所写内容与要求无关。Dearfellowclassmates,Withjointeffortofourgroup,ourproject“InterviewingOlderGenerationsaboutTheirLifestyles”turnedouttobeahugesuccess.(背景)Here,I’mhonoredtoshareourexperienceinhowtocarryitout.Aimingtobridgegenerationgapanddeepenmutualunderstanding,theprojectoffersusaninsightintovariouslifestylesseniorshave.(要点1：项目目的)Toconductanin-depthinterview,you’dbettermakeafullpreparationinadvance,includingthelistsofintervieweesandquestions.Duringtheinterview,gentlewordsandsofttonearenecessarytoencouragetheoldtoopentheirheartsandsharemore.Lastbutnotleast,don’tforgettoorganizethecollectedinformationandwriteareport.(要点2：项目经验)Hopefully,you’llfindourexperienceusefulandbereadytostartyourownproject.(要点3：祝愿)Thankyou!样卷分析第四档 评价 LEC评价法下载LEC评价法下载评价量规免费下载学院评价表文档下载学院评价表文档下载 ：字数不足，结构不清晰，有严重的语法错误评价：覆盖了主要内容要点，但没有汇报的格式，存在较多的语法错误第三档评价：基本涵盖要点，但内容上缺少背景介绍，结构稍显混乱，存在较多语法错误。第三档评价：基本涵盖要点，结构清晰，但表彰等相关表达不准确，存在较多的语法错误。第三档评价：要点齐全，句式等表达多样，但要点分布不均匀第二档评价：要点齐全，句式等表达丰富多样，但对项目结果进行过多描述，内容分布不均第二档评价：要点齐全，结构清晰，句式多样，存在部分语法错误，但不影响理解。第二档评价：要点齐全，结构清晰，句式语言丰富多样第一档PART1读后续写contents1解读续写文本2抓伏笔自问式思路启发3优秀学生作文及下水作文4相似“历险”类续写考题对比5小情节构建及可读性细节描写解读续写文本01OnaSundayafternoon,KianaFrenchwashavingfunfishingwithherfatherandyoungersister,notknowingthenextminute,theywouldstrugglenottosinkinthefreezingwater.Their12-footboatwastakinginwaterlittlebylittle,andthewindwaspickingup.Herfather,GaryFrench,hurriedtooperatetheengine,whileKiana,16,wasinthemiddlewithCierrah,hersister,frightenedbutstillabletokeepcalm.KianaaskedCierahtotakeoffoneofhercowboyboots,withwhichshegotsomeofthewaterout.Hardasshetried,thatlittleeffortwouldnothelpstoptheboatsinking.Momentslater,theunthinkablehappened.Theboatwasfullofwaterandthenitfippedover.Kianaandhersisterweredumpedinthewater.Theirfather,whohadhadasurgerysixmonthsago,managednottobethrownintothewaterbutseemedtohavegreatpaininthechestduetothesuddenchange.KianaquicklyputonherlifejacketandsawCerrah'sandherfather'slifejacketsfloatingaway.Shereactedquicklytogetthembackandheldhersisterontotheboat.Theyweresofaroutinthemiddleofthelakethattheycouldnotseetheshoreclearly.What'sworse,itwasgettinghardertostayabovethewaves.Theirfatherswamoverandhuggedhistwogirls,Cierrahcryingsilently.Kianaheardherbelovedsistermurmur,“Ican'tfeelmyfeet.”Kianaknewtheonlythingtodowastogettoshoreherselfandfindhelp.Shelokedupatherfather,exchangingaconcernedglance,turnedroundandswamashardasshecouldtowardstheshore.Fightingagainstthestrongcurrentsandcoldwind,shescreamedforhelpatthetopofherlungseverythreeminutesorso.Astrongwindblew,andshelookedbackonlytoseehersister'sandfather'sheadsbobbing(浮动)inthewater.Sheburstintotears,thinkinghersisteranddadweredead,becauseshewastakingtoolong.01Readforseptcccc---ThemesRead故事的主题语境为“人与社会”，主题为“历险”。主角Kiana和爸爸妹妹在湖里游船钓鱼，忽然间船沉了，三人都掉进冰冷的湖水中。刚做完手术的父亲和年幼的妹妹无力游动，Kiana奋力向岸边游去，忽然看见了远处有一艘船......OnaSundayafternoon,KianaFrenchwashavingfunfishingwithherfatherandyoungersister,notknowingthenextminute,theywouldstrugglenottosinkinthefreezingwater.Their12-footboatwastakinginwaterlittlebylittle,andthewindwaspickingup.Herfather,GaryFrench,hurriedtooperatetheengine,whileKiana,16,wasinthemiddlewithCierrah,hersister,frightenedbutstillabletokeepcalm.KianaaskedCierahtotakeoffoneofhercowboyboots,withwhichshegotsomeofthewaterout.Hardasshetried,thatlittleeffortwouldnothelpstoptheboatsinking.Momentslater,theunthinkablehappened.Theboatwasfullofwaterandthenitfippedover.Kianaandhersisterweredumpedinthewater.Theirfather,whohadhadasurgerysixmonthsago,managednottobethrownintothewaterbutseemedtohavegreatpaininthechestduetothesuddenchange.Hint:Cierrahwouldeventuallywaitpatientlyforhelp.Hint:Kianaswamtoshorealoneforhelp.KianaquicklyputonherlifejacketandsawCerrah'sandherfather'slifejacketsfloatingaway.Shereactedquicklytogetthembackandheldhersisterontotheboat.Theyweresofaroutinthemiddleofthelakethattheycouldnotseetheshoreclearly.What'sworse,itwasgettinghardertostayabovethewaves.Theirfatherswamoverandhuggedhistwogirls,Cierrahcryingsilently.Kianaheardherbelovedsistermurmur,“Ican'tfeelmyfeet.”Kianaknewtheonlythingtodowastogettoshoreherselfandfindhelp.Shelokedupatherfather,exchangingaconcernedglance,turnedroundandswamashardasshecouldtowardstheshore.Fightingagainstthestrongcurrentsandcoldwind,shescreamedforhelpatthetopofherlungseverythreeminutesorso.Astrongwindblew,andshelookedbackonlytoseehersister'sandfather'sheadsbobbing(浮动)inthewater.Sheburstintotears,thinkinghersisteranddadweredead,becauseshewastakingtoolong.showingtheurgencyoftherescuemissionAllthewordsinredreflectedtheconcernandbraveryofKianaforherfatherandsister.02Readforseptcccc---Setting&CharactersReadS--Setting(when/where)where:inthemiddleofthelakewhen:onaSundayafternoonC--CharactersKiana:A16-year-oldgirlDad：whohadhadasurgerysixmonthsagoCierrah(sister):frozenfeet03ReadReadforConflictsandpredictingtheplotQ1:Whatdilemmadidthewholefamilyface?Q2:Whatwasthesituationofeachcharacter?1.Their12-footboatwastakinginwaterlittlebylittle,andthewindwaspickingup.2.Littleeffortwouldnothelpstoptheboatsinking.3.Theywerefarfromtheshore.Itwashardtostayabovethewaves.1.Theirfather,GaryFrenchhadhadasurgerysixmonthsagoandhadgreatpaininthechest.2.Theyoungersister,Cierrah,cryingsilently,couldn’tfeelherfeet.3.BeforeKianareachedtheshoretoaskforhelp,herbelovedonesmightbedead.ItwasimpossibleforCierrahalonetosaveherbelovedones.Soitwasthepeopleintheboatwhocouldonlysavethemundersuchurgentcircumstance.04ReadforEmotionandSettingdescriptionReadPara.1:Withdesperatetears,shesuddenlyspottedaboatwithafigurewalkingonit…Para.2:Oncerescued,theywererushedtoshore,whereaconcernedgroupwaitedfortheirarrival…Kianatriedtoswimbacktotheshoreandscreamedforhelp.Herfatherandsisterwerestruggling.anxiousanddesperateTheystrugglednottosinkinthefreezingwater.frightenedbutkeepcalmTheyweredumpedinthewater.scaredandhelplessStoryMountain抓伏笔自问式思路启发02Para.1:Withdesperatetears,shesuddenlyspottedaboatwithafigurewalkingonit.Para.2:Oncerescued,theywererushedtoshore,whereaconcernedgroupwaitedfortheirarrival.1.HowwouldKianareacttoaskforhelp?2.HowwouldpeopleontheboatsaveKiana?3.HowwouldKianasavehersisterandfatherwiththehelpofthepeopleontheboat?1.Whatwouldtheconcernedgroupdowiththem?2.Howwouldtheyexpressgratitudeafterbeingsaved?3.Howwouldthestorybeendedwith?HowwouldKianafeelafterthisaccident?06ReadforCluesandpredictthePlotRead优秀下水作文03下水作文version1Para.1:Withdesperatetears,shesuddenlyspottedaboatwithafigurewalkingonit.Theseeminglyextinguishedhopewasrekindledandshescreamedforhelpagainwhileswimmingasquicklyasshecouldtowardstheboat.Fortunately,themanontheboatcaughtthesignalandreactedinnotime.Themanoperatedtheengineandfollowedtheguidanceofthelittlepoorsoul,whowaspale-facedbyfrightbutsharped-eyedwiththedeterminationtohelpherbelovedones.Onreachingwheretheboatlay,Kianaquicklyspottedthelifejacketofhersisterandjumpedintothewater,pulledherupwithhermightystrength.Themanontheboatdraggedthemonboard,thencamethefather.Para.2:Oncerescued,theywererushedtoshore,whereaconcernedgroupwaitedfortheirarrival.Anxiousandconcerned,thegrouponshorecheckedtheconditionsofthefatherandthelittlegirl.Garysunkintounconsciousnessbeforetheyspottedhim,forheheldhislittleangelCierrah.Thegroupofpeopleappliedfirstaidtohimandputpressureonhischest.Finally,Garychokedoutthemurkywaterandhistwodaughtersheavedasighofrelief,huggingtightlytogether.Recoveringabit,Garyandhisdaughtersshowedthegroupwithastringofthanks.Theyclearlyknewthatwithouttheirtimelyhelp,theycouldhavebeenswallowedbythelake.Asurgeofgratitudewelledupintheirhearts,remindingthemtopasstheloveforward.下水作文version2Para1:Withdesperatetears,shesuddenlyspottedaboatwithafigurewalkingonit.SothrilledwasKianathatshefeltaburstofpowersurgingthroughherbody,whichdrovehertoyellforhelpagain.Shockedandanxious,peopleonthatboatnoticedher,hurriedtooperatetheengineandthenapproachedher.Afterwhatseemedlikeonethousandyears,Kianawaspulledontotheboat.Tremblingbecauseofthefreezingwateraswellasunbearablewind,Kianabeggedthemtorescueherfatherandsisterimmediately,“Please…pleasehelpmyfamily…”Withoutasecondthought,theydrovetotheboat,gotclosertothefatherandthesisterandpulledthemoutofwaterwhileoneofthemcalledtheambulance.Para2: Oncerescued,theywererushedtoshore,whereaconcernedgroupwaitedfortheirarrival.Beingfrozenandmotionless,Kianaandhersistercouldnotmoveaninchbecauseofthecoldnessaswellasanarrowescape.Carefulandconcerned,peoplecarriedthevictimsofftheboat,coveredablanketonthemandpassedthemintotheambulance,wheretheirfathergotapropertreatmenttohischest.Lyingonthebedandglancingatallthepeopleatpresent,Kianacouldn’tbearhergratefultears.“Havenotbeensomanynicestrangershere,thingswouldhavebeenworse.”Strongwindstillblewoutside,butwarmthofkindnessstayedinsidepeople’shearts.相似“历险与助人”类续写考题对比042022年3月深圳一模“解救困车人”LastMarch,Margaritodrovetovisithismotherwholivedinthecountryside.Whenhesetoffforhome,Margarito’smotherlookedatthedarkskyandnoticedthesignofacomingstorm.Worriedaboutherson'ssafety,shetoldhimtodriveascarefullyaspossibleonhiswayhomeandhepromisedtogiveheracalluponhisarrival.Withhismother'swordsinmind,Margaritoapproachedthemainroadcarefully.Soon,itstartedtorainheavily.Eagertogethome,Margaritobegantodrivefaster.Twohourslater,hecametoabumpymountainroadthathadbeenfloodedbyacreek（小溪）.Margarito,drivingafour-wheeldrivetruck,figuredthathewouldbeOK.Atthatmoment,hedidn'trealizethatsuchathoughtwouldbeabigmistake.Itwashalfwayacrossthecreekthatanunfortunateincidenttookplace:Therushingwatersgrabbedholdofhisvehicle,pushingitofftheroadandsendingitdownarockycreekbed.Thetruckfinallystoppedsome80feetaway.Margarito'sproblemsonlygrewfromthereasthewaterhadsomehowpositionedthetruckintothecreekbankata45-degreeangle,makingitdifficultforhimtoopenthedriver'ssidedoor.Injuredandtrappedinsidewiththemuddywaterrisingquickly,Margaritowascertainhewasgoingtodie.Shakingwithfear,hewasatalossaboutwhattodo.OntheroadrightbehindMargaritowereadeliveryworkernamedSteveandhisnephewMike,whowereonthewaytodeliverfurnituretocustomersinthecountryside.Theywitnessedthehorribleincident,andwhenMargarito'struckcametorestinthemiddleoftheoverflowingcreek,Stevequicklybegantotakeaction.First,hegrabbedaropefromthebackofhisvehicleandusedittoensurehecouldsafelyapproachthetruck.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Next,heturnedtoMikeandyelled,“Givemearock!"MargaritowasabouttothankSteveandMikewhenthemobilephoneinhisjacketpocketrang环境描写巧妙回扣 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所提内容Next,heturnedtoMikeandyelled,“Givemearock!”Hearinghisuncle’surgentcommand,Mikeknewthesituationwasmuchtougherthanheimagined.Itmeantthedoorcouldn’tbeopenedfromoutside,butitmustbebrokeninto.Hebentdownandfoundasharpandheavystone.AfterStevegottherock,hepunchedthewindowglasswithitusingallhismightystrengthoverandoveragain.Itcrackedandbrokeandbecamepieces.Withinseconds,Margaritowaspulledoutfromthefuggytruck.MargaritowasabouttothankSteveandMikewhenthemobilephoneinhisjacketpocketrang.Itwashismom’scalling,concerninghissafety.Gasping,Margaritotoldherwhathadhappenedandhowhewasrescuedbythetwobravedeliverydrivers.Hismomsobbedandcouldn’tthankthemmorethroughthephone,knowingdeeplythatwithoutthesestrangers’determinationandwillingnesstohelp,herson’slifewouldhavebeeningreatdangerorworseotherwise.ToMargarito,thisincidentwasalifelonglesson.Atfirst,Surrelldidn'tseetheblacksmokeorflamesshootingfromthewindowsofhisneighbors'home.HeandhiswifewerejusthavingadinnerintheirownhouseinAllentown,Pennsylvania,whentheyheardsomeonescreaming:"Thehouseisonfire!”Hewenttoinvestigate.That'swhenhesawtwowomenandagirlcrazilyatalossontheirporch(走廊).Itwashisneighbour'shouse.“Thebaby'sinsidethere!"oneofthewomencried.Thoughthefiredepartmenthadbeencalled,Surrell,then64,instinctively(本能地)raninside."Thebaby"was8-year-oldTiaraRoberts,whoalwayscalledhimUncleSurrell.Shewasthewoman'sgranddaughterandaplaymateofSurrell'sthreeyoungestkids,8,10,and12.TheothertwoontheporchwereTiara'sauntandcousin.Enteringtheburninghousewaslikerunninginto"abucketofblackpaint".ThethicksmokecausedSurrelltowalkblindlyaround,burnedhiseyes,andmadeitimpossibleforhimtobreathe.Hefelthisthroatandlungsburned,andeveryblinkstung(蛰)hiseyes.Theconditionswouldhavebeenverydangerousforanyone,butforSurrell,whohaschronicobstructivepulmonarydisease(慢性阻塞性肺病)andwasinhospitaljusthalfayearago,theywerelife-risking.Afterafewminutesinthesmoke-filledhousesearchingbutinvain,heranoutsidetocatchhisbreath."WhereisTiara?"heaskeddesperately。“Thesecondfloor."herauntshoutedbackSurrellknewhecouldn’tholdhisbreathforlong.Soheutteredalittleprayer:"Well,God,thisisit.Yougottohelpme,becauseI'mnotcomingoutwithoutthatlittlegirl.”Para.1Takingadeephealth,hewentinasecondtime.Para.2Surrellwokeupinthehospitalacoupleofdayslater.火灾救人Para1:Takingadeepbreath,hewentinasecondtime.Thedarknesswasoverwhelming(adj.势不可挡的，压倒的).Heranblindlyintheblackness,andfinallymadeittothesecondfloor,wherehewasmetbyintense(adj.巨大的)heat.Hewasalreadyoutofbreath.“Babygirl,whereareyou?”Hecrieddesperately.Allhecouldhearwasthepoppingofburningwood.Thenasoftbutdistinct(adj.清楚的)moan(n.呻吟)emerged.Hequicklycrawled(vt.爬)towardthesound.Finally,hetouchedsomething.Ashoe,thenanankle.HepulledTiaratowardhimandhuggedhertightandsaid,“Uncle’sgotyou.”Thelastthingheremembered,hewasoutside.Para2:Surrellwokeupinthehospitalacoupleofdayslater.Havingsufferedsevereburnstohiswindpipe(n.气管)andtheupperportion(n.部分)ofhislungs,hespentanothertwoweeksinthehospital.Tiararecoveredsoonandwasreleasedfromthehospital(出院)aftertwodays.ShewenttovisitSurrelleveryday,talkingwithSurrell,thoughSurrell,whosethroatclosedoffandwhohadtotakeextramedication,can‘tspeakanyword.“Thankyouforsavingmylife,UncleSurrell.”Tiarasmiled.“It’sasmallpricetopay,”Surrellthought.“butI’ddoitagaininaheartbeat.”(=withoutthinkingaboutit瞬间).小情节构建及可读性细节描写05Shockedandanxious,peopleonthatboatnoticedher,hurriedtooperatetheengineandthenapproachedher.1.带着震惊和焦虑，船上的人注意到她，急忙操作引擎，然后接近她。小情节一.救人Onreachingwheretheboatlay,Kianaquicklyspottedthelifejacketofhersisterandjumpedintothewater,pulledherupwithhermightystrength.2.在到达船的位置时，Kiana迅速发现了她妹妹的救生衣，她跳入水中，用她巨大的力量把妹妹拉了上来。3.又焦急又担忧，岸上的人检查父亲和小女孩的情况。Anxiousandconcerned,thegrouponshorecheckedtheconditionsofthefatherandthelittlegirl.Theyclearlyknewthatwithouttheirtimelyhelp,theycouldhavebeenswallowedbythelake.1.他们清楚地知道，如果没有及时的帮助，他们可能会被湖水吞没。2.外面依然刮着大风，但是善良的温暖还留在人们的心里。Strongwindstillblewoutside,butwarmthofkindnessstayedinsidepeople’shearts.小情节二、获救感受致谢Thanks.感谢惠州中学高三优秀团队的付出！