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2019稽阳联考读后续写年份体裁主题细节描写特点年份体裁主题细节描写特点2016.10记叙文Jane和丈夫在野营时吵架走散并迷路侧重心理描写2017.6记叙文Mac和朋友骑行途中偶遇恶狼侧重动作描写2017.7记叙文“我”与健忘母亲的旅行趣事侧重人物性格描写2018.6记叙文“我”与父亲去西部荒野度假时骑马迷路侧重环境描写indirectcharacterization(间接人物塑造)Torevealacharacter’straitsbydescribinghisorherappearance,thoughts,words,actions,andothercharacters’commentsonhimorher.Readforplot把握故事情节Readforclues寻找故事线索Readfordevelopment推测故事发展Howtoreadanarrativestory?AstoryEvent(what)Time(when)Place(where)Characters(who)Readforplot(把握故事情节)Plot(how)阅读下面短文根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成个完整的故事Afterstudyforhours.Iwentoutsideanduptotheroofnearbyforabreakandwatchedpeopleswimminginthesea.Itwasasunnyday-ablue,cloudlessskyoveracalmsea.Butthen,asIlookedinthedistance,Idiscoveredaseriesofthreeorfourbigwavesheadingtowardstheshore.I'dseenthesemini-tsunamis(小型海啸)manytimesbefore.Theywereheadingatspeedinthedirectionoftheswimmingarea.Mostpeopleknewtolookoutforthem,butfromthescreamsthatstartedcomingfromthebeach,Icouldtellsomeonewasintrouble.Withoutthinking,Irandownintothestreet,holdingmybodyboard(冲浪板)onthewayandshoutedatastrangertocallthecoastguard(海岸整卫)MyneighborTomhadheardthescreamingaswellandwasalsooutsidewithhisbodyboard,sotogetherwerushedtothestepsthatleddowntotheseaOncewegotcloser,wediscoveredthewaveshadpulledaboyandagirlintotheopensea.Iknowthatthenearestboatwouldtakeatleast30minutestoreachus.Iwasn'tusedtothissortofemergency--I'dneverbeentrainedasalifeguard--butIdidn'tthinktwiceabouttryingtosavethem.IsupposeinawayIwantedtoimpresseveryone;at19,adeallikethatcanseemlikeagoodopportunitytoshowoffTomandIdivedintothewaterandittookus10minutestogettothem.Whenwefinallyreachedthem,theywerealmostlifelesswithonlytheirheadscominginandoutofthewater.Wecouldtelltheywerestillalivefromtheirsmallbreathsbutitwascleartheywouldn'thavebeenabletostaytheremuchlonger.Iheldtheboyandpulledhimovermyboard.Tomthenmovedthegirlontohisboard.Readforplota.Wepulledkidsontoourboards.b.Ishoutedatastrangertocallthecoastguard.c.Thekidswerealmostlifeless.d.Aboyandagirlwerepulledintothesea.e.IdivedintotheseawithTomtosavethekids.f.Inotedmini-tsunamisheadingtowardstheshore.g.Iwentoutforabreakafterhoursofstudy.onasunnydayattheseasideaboyandagirl;I;Tom;coastguardsavingtwokidsgfdbecaReadforclues...Withoutthinking,Irandownintothestreet,holdingmybodyboardonthewayandshoutedatastrangertocallthecoastguard....Generally,abodyboardis1.5to2.7minlengthanditweighsabout11to25kg.toolhelpcharactertraits:thoughtful/considerate...indirectcharacterizationsettingincitingincidentRisingactionClimaxFallingactionResolutionDenouementA______________skyovera_____seabluecloudlesscalmMin-tsunamis______towardstheshore.______startedfrombeachheadedScreamswe____tothesteps,leddowntotheseaReadfordevelopmentrushedWereachedtheboyandgirlbut___________fromthelandtoofaraway划线词分类人物类事物类动作类距离时间划线词分类人物类aboyandagirl;Tom事物类waves;boat;opportunity;bodyboard动作类swimming;save距离inthedistance时间longerReadfordevelopmentPara.1Wediscussedpushingthembacktotheshore,butweweretoofarout.Para2.Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwokidswereingoodcondition.Theproblemswemet:Thehelpwegot:tiredness/fiercewaves/dyingkids...thecoastguard...Thegratefulnesswereceived:ThelessonIlearnt:fromthetwokids'parents/themedia...Onesimpleactofkindnesscanreallymakeadifference.Wherethereiskindness,thereisamiracle.Onegoodturndeservesanother....ReadfordevelopmentHowtocontinueanarrativestory?Mindyourhandwriting注意 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写Mindyourlanguage注意语言Mindyourtheme注意主题MeaningfulColourfulBeautifulindirectcharacterization自然环境描写——描写波涛汹涌Thecoastlinewashiddenbehindthe_________waves(汹涌澎湃的浪涛)withalmostnoonetobeseen.roaring3.Thebigwind____________________(在耳边咆哮),andwewerepushedawayfromtheshorefartherandfarther.roaredthroughourears5.Thefiercewaves_________________________(没有消退的迹象).showednosignofdyingdown6.Theseawas_________(汹涌的；风浪大的)thatdayanditwasdifficultto________(控制)thebodyboard.roughhandle人文环境描写——描写声音传来4.Atthatmoment,ashrillwhistle(汽笛声)______________(划破天空).1.Adistantsound_________________________.(传入耳朵)reachedourears2.Asoft,reedy(似笛声的)sound___________________________.(漂浮在海上)floatedacrossthesea3.Thesoundoftheboat_______________________.(在我们耳内回响)echoedinourearsrippedtheair人物描写——描写疲倦5.CastingalookatTom,Icouldtellhewasalso_____________________________(明显地精疲力尽了).3.___________________(尽管很累),wedidn’tstop.Grittingoutteeth,wekeptswimming.Exhaustedaswewere4.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Ifelt_________________(非常累)whileswimminghardtokeepmyselfafloat(漂浮着的)./fəˈtiːgd/extremelyfatiguedapparentlyworn-out——描写害怕1.Itookadeepbreathand_____________(害怕地咽了口吐沫).swallowedhard4.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffear______________________________.(在身体涌动)surgingthroughmywholebody5.Astimetickedby,fear___________________(爬上我心头)andIcouldhardlytellhowlongIcould_________(前行).creptuponmyheart(creep)ploughon人物描写人物描写——描写害怕7.Iwas_________________________(被恐惧感淹没).floodedwithasenseofhorror9.Ifelt________________(一阵焦虑)_________________(袭来).awaveofanxietysweptovermybodysweep——描写挣扎努力人物描写3....,Weswam____________(全力以赴地).toothandnail4.We__________________(不遗余力地)swimtowardstheshore.sparednoeffortto5.We_________________________(互换了坚定的神情),thenploughedon(继续前行)__________________(难以置信的速度).exchangedadeterminedlookatanincrediblespeed人物描写——描写如释重负4.Onhearingthegoodnews,TomandI_________________(如释重负地叹了口气),grinningmerrilyateachother.sighedingreatrelief5.____________(如释重负地微笑),I_________________(感到一阵自豪).Smilinginrelieffeltarushofpride6._____________(狂喜)toseeaboatcomingtoourrescue,TomandI____________________.(如释重负地松了口气)OverjoyedbreathedasighofreliefindirectcharacterizationA19-year-oldstudentnaturalsettingculturalsettingcharacter'sfeelings/words/actions/monologues...Aherocharactertraits:thoughtful/brave/courageous/considerate...Onepossibleversion:Wediscussedpushingthembacktotheshore,butweweretoofarout.Wehadtowait,tryingtokeepthemonthebodyboards.Pattingtheirfacestowakethemup,wecontinuouslytoldthemtobestrong.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Ifeltextremelyexhaustedwhileswimminghardtokeepmyselfafloat.CastingalookatTom,Icouldtellhewasalsoapparentlyworn-out.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseofhorrorsurgingthroughmywholebody.Saltstinging(刺痛)myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.ButIstillshoutedinmyhead:focus.Insheer（完全地）desperation(在绝望中),Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemheadingtowardsusinthedistance.Thankyou,Lord.Quitesoon,Ifeltstrongarmspullmeoutoftheseaontotheboard,andthetwokidsweresenttothehospitalwithoutdelay.Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwokidswereingoodcondition.Sighinginrelief,Icouldn’tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhavediediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.ObviouslyIhaddoneabigdealwhichissurelyagoodopportunitytoshowoff.Ihadexpectedtoexperiencesomesortofsenseofwellbeingorgreatness,butnoneofthatcame.Ratherthanfeellikeahero,Ibelieveanyonewhocouldswimwouldhavedonethesamething.Theend!