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作文，站在什么的门口名师点评作文题:“站在门口”选择很多 2009-06-08 08:56:00 来源: 长江商报(武汉) 跟贴 0 条 手机看赛事 华师教授:命题实在，上手容易，想拿高分有点难 湖北省作文题: 请以《站在___的门口》为题写一篇文章。(60分) 要求:请先将题目补充完整，并写在答题卡上，然后作文。立意自定，文体不限。可以记述经历，抒发感情，发表议论，展开现象等等。不少于800字。 与近两年的湖北省 高考 地理事物空间分布特征语文高考下定义高考日语答题卡模板高考688高频词汇高考文言文120个实词 作文题相比，今年我省的高考作文题没有延续材料作文这一形式，而是采用了半命题作文。相对于材料作文，半命题作文对考生来说到底是难是易,本报特意邀请了多位专家、名师对今年的作文题作出分析点评。 “今年湖北省的高考作文题很实在，考生上手很容易。”昨日下午，华中师范大学文学院教授谭邦和认为，作文的这种命题方式值得鼓励。 考生有三种行文形式 谭邦和说，往年的高考作文多是材料作文，并不利于考生发挥，因为材料越长，给考生发挥的空间就越小。而今年是半命题方式，这就给考生提供了非常宽广的平台。 “站在___的门口”这道题的行文方式有三种:第一，以写“实”为主，如“在爷爷的家门口”等，这种题目可以回忆往事，写出真情实感，以记叙文为主;第二，以写“虚”为主，如“站在未来的门口”等，需要考生有较深远的思想，可以写成议 论文 政研论文下载论文大学下载论文大学下载关于长拳的论文浙大论文封面下载 ;第三，“半实半虚”型，如“站在大学的门口”等，这类题既有叙述又夹有议论。 今年作文很难拉开差距 今年的高考作文题，怎样才更易得高分,谭邦和教授认为，若思想深度一般的考生，建议以写“实”为主，即以真人真事来表达真情实感;若写成 议论文 议论文格式议论文递进式结构议论文框架结构议论文文体知识ppt议论文并列式结构 ，则需要有相当深度，站在社会、人生的高度来行文，也易得高分。 谭邦和说，在议论文中若只是泛泛而谈，并不会很精彩，“虽然作文题容易上手，但也不容易拉开差距，关键看个人能力的高低。” 谭邦和认为，今年湖北省的题目让考生很容易上手，也就是说大多数考生都不会偏题，有话可写，相比部分外省的作文题要容易些。 intensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, multiple groups from a single radiation-belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5-2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision 如全国卷一作文“小动物游泳引发的评论”，是则材料作文，给考生选择行文角度有一定的限制;江苏省作文题“品味时尚”，题目不太易懂，下手有些难度，再如湖南省作文题“踮起脚尖”，也没有湖北的考题易懂。 本报记者 何辉 实习生 李莉 今年作文命题有三大变化 武汉市第四十中学特级语文教师靳立鸿 与往年不同，今年的作文命题突出的有三大变化:一是“抢眼”，令人神思遄飞。“ 站在___的门口”非完整命题，只是半命题。半命题有一定的灵活性，那么拟写的一半题目，可以置短语之首，可以置短语之尾，也可以置短语中间。 二是语境“形断意连”，虚实互见。综合考察语境，考生所见充其量只是“冰山一角”，那隐藏着的词语或者说内容，需要考生经过审慎思考、甄别、遴选，楔入“站在”与“门口”之间，形成一个特定语境，从而营造一个可见可感的情景氛围。 三是驰骋想象，收放裕如。这个半命题预留给考生偌大的选择余地，但又不是什么都可以写，在不限制中有限制;可以递进式追问，“站在”什么“门口”,为什么站在“这个”门口,站在“这个”门口是勇往直前还是畏葸退缩,毫不犹豫地前行需要什么方法,要达到什么目的,一定要扣住“站在”什么“门口”这个语境，在限制中有不限制，具有一定的开放性。总之，考生可以尽情抒写“站在”什么“门口”的所思所感，充分展示自我精神面貌，写出不同于他人的个性特质，这叫有个性地写作，有创意地表达。本报记者 姚德春 实习生 涂曼子 让学生把握写作的主动权 武汉市语文学科带头人、武汉外校高级教师 吴小平 《站在___的门口》作为半命题作文，这个 设计 领导形象设计圆作业设计ao工艺污水处理厂设计附属工程施工组织设计清扫机器人结构设计 体现了语文新课程标准的思想，让学生有相当多的写作自主权，必将激发学生的写作激情，写出更多高质量的作文。 语文新课程标准对写作的要求有“提倡自由作文，根据个人特长和兴趣写作，力求有个性、有创意地表达”、“能有意识地考虑写作的目的和对象，负责地表达自己的看法”。半命题作文与全命题作文相比，选材有较大的自由度;与话题作文相比，适当作些限制，既可使评卷更准确，也可避免考生千题一文的套文现象。 这个题目中的“门口”，可实可虚，可以是比喻性的。因而，中间填入的词或短语，可以是时间方面的，如“十八岁”“历史”“季节”等;可以是空间方面的，如“家”“城市”“国家”等;也可以是“事物”或“事件”方面的，如“光明”“利益”等等。 vision vision2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development -g, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5ral and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturincultu ng the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative,roups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River alo17 g characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists ofarea layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own mpactrivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively co decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in threeup a ith natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, w belt open development. Spatial structure of-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul2 站在门口，可以有“出进” 的选择，有对“过去与未来”的思考，考生只要调动自己写作的积累，开头和结尾注意与填入的词语响应，写出一篇主题明确，语言优美的文章，应该不难。 本报记者 姚德春 实习生 涂曼子 同题作文欣赏 站在绝境的门口(摘录) 武汉二中高三(1)班学生 陈卓 已被保送至北京大学 当奔跑的藏羚羊被凶狠的狮子追逐到险峻的悬崖边，当奔跑的流水撞上横跨河道的顽石上，当巍峨的大树遭遇了猛烈的狂风暴雨……绝境的大门可谓无所不在。 当曾经旺盛到不可一世的土地被外族铁骑践踏，当无能的当权政府厚颜无耻地投奔侵略者，当英勇的人民起义陷入不断爆发再不断遭到镇压的循环，当人民的生活只能用“饥寒交迫”、“民不聊生”来形容时，还有什么比绝境更适合描述这样的旧中国社会呢,此时，中华民族站在了绝境的门口，那些曾经的爱国人士在此绝境的重压下，放弃了继续抗争，纷纷选择了沉沦。中华民族曾经旺盛的生命力似乎就要燃烧殆尽，走向枯萎。 …… 一场8.0级的强力地震在汶川爆发，而连绵的阴雨又阻隔了外界的救援之路，这对废墟下一个年幼的孩子不啻为绝境。然而郎铮——一个不过四岁的孩子始终坚信着自己会存活下去，这股强大的信念陪伴他度过了废墟下的魔鬼般生活。当他自己被救出时，他用了一个不太标准的军礼回报了解放军的援助与自己的信念。 …… 记者 姚德春 实习生 涂曼子 整理 站在十八岁门口(摘录) 武汉市外国语学校 高二(8)班 谢晓天 于马上看斗转星移，在笑语中迎春去秋来，十七载日夜兼程，我终于站在了十八岁的门口。 …… 在这不长的十七年里，我经历了辗转，经历了驿站，经历了坑洼，经历了通途;有挫折，有成功，有失望，有喜悦。 我有毅力在十年寒窗里坚持不懈;我有意志在重压下 es gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to featureter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern t consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimistricnt along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each dpatterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on developmeent green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized developm city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision-res and modern industry. 2.5and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other featuearch the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative res3 永不言弃;我有信心迈过一切困难;我有微笑享受当下的生活。 我在成长。 回首过去的十七年，我又找到了迈入十八岁的自信。站在十八的门口，我似乎也不再怅然低徊。 的确，十八岁固然让人不适应，但它却从不缺少激情。六十年前，就是那一群又一群十八岁的青年们，在中国的疆土上挥洒着自己的热血，酣畅淋漓的谱写了青年史上最雄浑壮丽的乐章。那一声声铿锵有力的“还我青岛”振聋发聩，十八岁的人们唤醒了老幼青壮，唤醒了沉睡的中国雄狮。 …… 记者 姚德春 实习生 涂曼子 整理 名师点评 语文试卷没有偏题怪题 点评人:武钢三中高三语文备课组组长 高级教师 高智勇 今年高考语文湖北卷以《考试大纲》和湖北省的《补充说明》为命题依据，考查学生的语文基础知识、基本能力，没有偏题、怪题，体现了“稳中求变、务本求实”的特点。总体来说，今年语文高考与去年难度持平，但相比去年，词语题和作文题难度稍有增加。 试卷版块结构、考查的考点保持不变。和去年一样，包括七大题23个小题，每大题考查的考点、题量也相同。第一大题考查语文基础知识，包括音、形、词语、病句、标点。其中第3题考查了词语的非常用义，难度较大，估计错误率会较高;其他4题都考查的常见类型，没有超过平时训练范围。 今年考卷的局部变化主要体现在以下几个方面:1.文言文阅读。今年选材出现了两个文言文段，有叙事，有议论，让人耳目一新，但阅读量并没有加大，题目难度也没有增加。第10题考查了双音节词的一词多义，与去年考查单一词义不同。2.现代文大阅读。第17题要求从词语运用、句式选择、修辞方法三方面赏析语言典雅的特点，体现了命题者重视品味文本语言的导向。 本报记者 张瑜琨 实习生 周丽薇 数学试卷 二年级数学试卷下载贵阳市八年级数学期末学前班上数学试卷高三数学试卷分析教案八年级上册数学试卷 难度系数降低 点评人:武钢三中数学教研组组长兼高三数学备课组组长 高级教师 詹立波 characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists ofarea layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own mpactrivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively co decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in threeup a ith natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, w belt open development. Spatial structure of-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mulvision vision2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development -g, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5ral and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturincultu ng the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative,roups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River alo17 g4 平和、常规、出乎意料——詹立波用这三个词来概括今年理科数学的试题。总体来说，今年试题比去年难度有所下降，没有偏题、怪题，考生只要注重常规题型、基本定义、常规运算不出错就可以得到不错的成绩。 “拿选择题第9题来说，考察得并不新颖，但考察导数定义很到位。”詹立波指出，重视数学中最基本定义的理解十分重要。 而后面解答题的前四题都是比较常规的题目，“17题是向量和三角函数综合;18题是立体几何，利用线面垂直、传统空间向量就可以计算出来;19题数列的第一问、第二问都对最后一问有强烈的铺垫，只要用常二项式展开，考生就可以算出来;20题考察抛物线、焦点的性质，这类题型复习和练习时都做得比较多，第二问只要考生不怕计算、大胆求证，一样可以做出来。”詹立波说，从近几年来看，高考数学越来越重视对基础题、数学常规题的考察，他同时建议明年考生应该把重心多放在基本定义的理解和常规题的练习上。 “虽然今年考题较去年容易，但考生之间还是很容易拉开距离。”詹立波指出，填空题第13题则考察指数的运算，即球面距离;15题利用数列关系递推就可以逐一计算出来，这两题计算量都比较大，考察了数学计算能力，只要考生能够静下心来解答就能做出来。 本报记者 张瑜琨 实习生 周丽薇 调查 高考第一天多数考生感觉题目不难 本报讯(记者 张瑜琨 郭婷婷 实习生 周丽薇)昨日是高考的第一天，让很多同学感到高兴的是，今年高考语文和数学两门感觉并不难。同时，同学们也普遍反映，想拿高分并非易事。 昨日上午语文考试结束后，记者在十四中、十五中、洪山高中等多个考点外随机采访了数十名考生。他们大多数表示，语文难度并不大，和平常复习、调考难易度差不多。 “作文难度不大，题目给人的感觉是比较容易上手的，但是要写好、写得精妙却也不是容易的事。”刚刚步出十四中考场的小吴说。 记者随机采访了7名考生，都反映题目难度乍看上去并不大，但是要做好困难也不少。洪山高中的一位考生说，“我补充的题目是„站在成功的门口‟，刚开始下笔的时候觉得能写的东西很多，但是越到后面把握越小，到结尾的地方却有点儿不知所云了。” 相对于上午语文的平静，下午的数学更加让同学们感到轻松，出考场时很多人都面带笑容。 “今年的题目挺简单的，做得很顺，比平时做的还轻松些。”考生唐同学笑着告诉记 es gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to featureter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern t consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimistricnt along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each dpatterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on developmeent green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized developm city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision-res and modern industry. 2.5and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other featuearch the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative res5 者，相对去年数学的难度，今年考题难度比较平缓。 又讯 据腾讯?大楚网昨日对湖北省考生的调查显示，619位考生参与了投票，33.92%的考生感觉高考语文试卷题目有点难，30.05%感觉一般，21.65%认为很难，14.38%觉得很简单;34.25%的考生认为今年高考作文题目不容易得高分，29.89%感觉一般，19.87%觉得很容易，15.99%认为有点难。 例一; 站在初三的门口 站在初三的门口，你有什么话想说,原来我们都只是做自己的朋友，从此冷暖自知到很久很久。 站在初三的门口，看你远去的寂寞。看来我们都还想回到从前过去，只是，明日已经变成天涯。 站在初三的门口，自由不再自由。只想让时间持久，不要漫过心的那一头。 站在初三的门口，你有什么话想说, 从指尖飞逝而过的年华，留下淡淡的回纹。看着潮起潮落，花开花谢，蓦然回首，才发现，自己已经离从前很远很远。童年已成为昨日的海角，豆蔻飘逝如花，我现在还在苦苦地寻觅，我明日的天涯。 我的眼前，永远都有的那条延绵不尽的小路，下一站，通往一个叫做“初三”的地方。有人说，那里的风景很美很美，美得让人忘了自己，忘了名利;有人说，那里很黑很黑，怕黑的孩子总是不自觉地走向悬崖，粉身碎骨。还有人说，那里很美也很黑，只是那里的人都很善良，那里的灯光很明亮，还有，那里的是是非非，会让你学会成长。 我听爸爸说过，初三是我必需经过的站点。只要穿过了它，我就能走向更广阔的天堂。当然，我还要记得有一边奔走，一边歌唱，所有的雏鸟都要开心的飞翔。 妈妈还对我说，我应该从现在开始，做好去初三旅行的准备。之后呢，我的行囊离装满了书籍和考卷。粮食可以没有，玩具可以抛开，但是，记住，你手中的笔一定一定不能放下。 现在，我站在初三的门口。那个美丽而又黑暗的地方。那个被称为地狱的地方。进入了初三，我就要从地狱里仰望天堂。 仰望天堂，我会记得，用一个优美的姿势去仰望天堂。 亲爱的哥哥，请你告诉我，进入初三的准确方向。我即将要撕杀于沙场，只为了那渺小的，一个叫做“高中”的地方。它是天空的一角，永远带着迷离的芳香。它永远召唤着一群又一群的我们，为了派上它的高点，而奋力搏杀。 我知道，我要走你曾经走过的小路。我知道，你曾经走得多么辉煌。如今，我只想好好的聆听，那些心灵的声音，因为从此以后，我便要将它们抛弃。 初三永远只能容纳学习，就连玩笑也显得那么多余。 我站在初三的门口，我有很多话想说。而现在，我只能说:从现在开始，学 vision vision2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development -g, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5ral and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturincultu ng the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative,roups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River alo17 g characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists ofarea layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own mpactrivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively co decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in threeup a ith natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, w belt open development. Spatial structure of-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul6 习便是惟一。 例二; 站在校园的门口 当太阳冲破地平线，放射出万丈光芒时，这是新的起点;当一个婴儿呱呱坠地，开始第一声哭喊时，这是新的起点;当我们踏上初三的列车，开始一年的奋斗旅程时，这也是新的起点～ 或许，你会为过去的虚度光阴而悔恨不已——当你在和同学打球时，时间在大汗淋漓中流走了;当你在电脑前手舞足蹈地玩游戏时，时间在随着游戏积分的增加而减少了;当你沉浸在小说扣人心弦的情节时，时间在字里行间中溜走了…… 春去秋来，四季交替不息，回首过去，尽管我们曾经是如此的年少轻狂、懵懂，但是那些已成为记忆的卡片，储藏在我们大脑的内存里。我们不必终日把自己封锁在昔日的过错中，也不必恋恋不息地抓着过去不放。看～我们正站在新的起跑线上，未来就在我们的前面。新的起点，意味着新的开始。我们要大声地对自己说:“我已经忘记了过去，我更期待我的未来～我相信，我一定能行～”。这样，把过去轻轻地放下来，收拾好心情，我们就能以更崭新的姿态，去迎接未来的挑战。 上帝对于每一个人都是公平的。他给我们每位学子的初三时光也是相等的。我们没有任何理由为“开始”而沾沾自喜，因为我们都在同一个起跑线上。只有谁能坚持到最后，谁才能笑得最好。所以，我们首先要订立一个明确恰当的目标。目标是一个航标，它能指引我们前进的方向。其次我们应该要珍惜每一分每一秒，去科学地合理安排时间、利用时间。懂得支配时间的人，就能事半功倍，而虚度时间的人，往往只能事倍而功半。我们还应该以更多的兴趣与耐性去与各科的文字、符号打交道，用毅力去战胜一切的困难…… 多少次孤灯相对，探索书山的蛛丝马迹，多少次月满西楼，畅游学海的浩瀚无垠。我们站在新的起点上，储备能量，翘首未来;我们站在初三的起跑线上，默默耕耘，等待收获。 要想搏击蔚蓝如洗的长空，我们要先成为雄鹰;要想无畏地迎接暴风雨的洗礼，我们要先长成参天的大树;要想通向未来之道，我们要先闯过初三～ 例三; 站在感恩的门口 感恩是一种处世哲学，是生活中的大智慧，学会感恩，应该是学会做人的一条基本准则。 “感恩的心，感谢有你，伴我一生，让我有勇气做我自己。感恩的心，感谢命运，花开花落我一样会珍惜……” 正如这首感恩的心的一样，我们要感谢许多。感谢父母十多年来的养育之恩;感谢老师孜孜不倦的教诲;感谢同学与朋友成长路上的一路相伴;感谢社会让我生活无忧无虑;感谢…… 2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision-res and modern industry. 2.5and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other featuearch the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative reses gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to featureter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern t consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimistricnt along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each dpatterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on developmeent green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized developm city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul7 在美国，11月的第四个星期四是感恩节，据说第一批美国人移民到美洲大陆时，恰逢寒冬时节，他们饥寒交迫，一百多人死了一半，善良的印第安人给他们送来了生活的必需品，使剩下来的一少半人有幸存活了下来。于是美国人为了感谢印第安人的救助、感谢上天就将这一天定为感恩节。 美国人每年到这一天举国感恩，而我则用365天，天天感恩～ 中国自古以孝为先，“孝”就是指对父母物质、精神上的感谢。为什么要“孝”父母呢,那是因为父母给了我们太多太多…… 这是我印象很深，发生在很早以前的一次“孝”: 一次，我们家熬夜看一个电视节目，到了10点我有些饿了就问妈妈可不可以吃袋方便面,慈祥的她自然同意了。 于是妈妈给我泡了袋方便面，我想:夜已很深了妈妈也一定饿了～但他却连一袋方便面都舍不得吃，留给她的儿子。我决定给妈妈泡一袋方便面。我又想:水太热可能吃不到嘴。我就灵机一动，拿凉水为妈妈泡好了一碗面。过了一会，我把面端到妈妈面前。妈妈想说什么，可欲言又止，双手接过面，面饼安静得躺在凉水里，没有一丝变化，我刚想对她说:“妈妈，可能时间不够再泡一会吧～”可没等我开口妈妈就咬了一口，幸福的嚼着，仿佛，这是他这辈子吃过的最美味的佳肴。妈妈一口接一口的吃着，脸上露出满意的笑容，会心地说:“我儿子，长大了，知道孝顺妈妈了～”看着妈妈的样子，我心里难过极了～我多么可敬的妈妈啊～他对我多年的养育之恩，却只吃了一碗没泡开的方便面，就知足了～ 感谢父母，带我来到这个美丽的世界，并以他们的白发和皱纹将我养育成人，让我有机会在这个精彩的世界上放飞精彩的自己～ 感谢老师，如同春风化雨一般输给了我们智慧，以沙哑的声音和粘满粉笔灰的双手换取我们的茁壮成长;感谢同学和朋友，他们的每一封信和安慰的话语赐予我以欢乐和安慰，在我困难的时候伸出了热情的双手。 感谢社会，生活在当今社会让我也有不尽的感激。回归一下历史:比如近代屈辱史时，人们吃不饱睡不好，谁能生活幸福,就算是中国发达的唐、汉时期，我们也是幸福的。我们再看看现在:邓小平改革开放给我们带来了经济腾飞，江泽民与时俱进使国民经济有了更快发展，胡锦涛和谐社会让我深刻的感受到生活在这样一个和平、发展、和谐的社会即幸福又幸运。现在由衷感谢，将来定会报答～ 感谢…… 如果用心体会，在我们身边每天都有感恩的事发生，时时都会有终生难忘的温馨。每天心怀感恩，就会有一个幸福、清净的境界。人不一定要有感恩的事，但要有感恩的心，这样人间才会充满温情，我们才能共建和谐社会。 vision vision2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development -g, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5ral and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturincultu ng the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative,roups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River alo17 g characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists ofarea layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own mpactrivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively co decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in threeup a ith natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, w belt open development. Spatial structure of-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul8 愿人人尽力去做感恩的事，有感恩的心～ 例四; 站在文学的门口 青山隐隐,绿水迢迢,我站在文学的门口,窥见那门内流转的,是墨笔生香,勾勒出清风明月的韵致;梧桐细雨,西窗红烛，我站在文学的门口,窥见那门内流淌的,是令人心旌摇动的浓愁与长情.站在文学的门口,我已能听到门里的笙箫,门里的叹息,门里的牧笛,门里的美妙,站在文学的门口,我心中摇曳着的思索,已化作一江春水,流入门内的世界. 站在文学的门口,我用一份敬畏的心情去聆听那些高贵灵魂的歌吟,去驻足观看那隐藏在文字之后的精神之花,去收获一份灿若朝阳的理想与对于崇高的向往. 当暮色四合时,一灯如豆,一书如帆,送我至文学的门口.那东临碣石的一代枭雄,酾酒临江,横槊赋诗,即使岁月染白了他的须发,依旧能够高唱“老骥伏枥,志在千里,烈士暮年,壮心不已”的不屈之音,那一份遒劲雄浑的意气,常使我击节而赞.那在乱世里漂泊沉沦的诗性女子,将国家之恨纺成染柳烟浓,吹梅笛怨得哀愁,纵然帘卷西风,人比黄花,也依旧要在绝灭之境,用柔弱的才情,留下浓墨重彩的一笔.那些铿锵或柔美的词章,溅落在历史的长河里,激荡起遥远的绝响. 被文学艺术化了的灵魂与生命,在文学的殿堂里凝固永恒.当我站在文学的门口,那轩举的意气已将我深深感染,那盛下了悲欢离合的真情泪滴已将我浸湿,他们以文学的方式存在于历史的视线里，轻易地将我俘获，又用他们高贵灵魂锻造的文字凝滞我的步伐,不肯再做那人间的闲狐兔. 站在文学的门口,那门里飘散出的生活的哲思,仿佛夜幕上璀璨的群星,将我的生命旅途照亮. 自嘲“职业是生病,写作是业余”的史铁生,他文字里关于生命的思索给予我深深的感动，他的坚忍使我在遭遇崎岖时亦能淡定从容.冰心笔下深邃的大海与圣洁的母爱亦使我在匆匆行走的间隙里驻足体察弥满我生活的爱意.读《钢铁是怎样炼成的》,我动容于保尔的钢铁意志,读《鲁滨逊漂流记》,我欣赏生命与自然的契合…… 被文学具体化了的生存形式与生活态度,如细雨,如飞花,浸湿生活铺就诗意的岁月,当我站在文学的门口,暮雨晨风阵阵飞来,让我走得坚强并且诗意. 站在文学的门口,终究只是欣赏文学别样的乾坤。我知道,终将有一日,我会走进文学的殿堂,用自己手中的笔勾勒出生命别样的风貌. 【点评】 欣赏文学里别样的乾坤，用一份敬畏的心情去聆听，去观看，去收获;徜徉在文学的海洋，体味艺术的灵魂与生命，领略作品飘散出的生活哲思，让“我”在生命旅途中走得坚强且诗意，淡定且从容。作者将思绪化作一江春水，流入文学门内的世界，信手拈来，纵情挥洒，感悟真切，议论生辉。文章积淀深厚，思路清晰， 2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision-res and modern industry. 2.5and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other featuearch the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative reses gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to featureter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern t consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimistricnt along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each dpatterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on developmeent green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized developm city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul9 语言典雅，书写美观。从作者对文学的热爱和语文素养看来，走进文学殿堂指日可待～点评:谭声祥 例五 站在老屋的门口 一座低矮的小木房，只在屋顶披着一层灰色的瓦，时光侵蚀了老屋的门。而我徘徊在门口，想着那些平常小事。 先前是爷爷守着老屋。他喜欢坐在门口，一口又一口优哉游哉地抽着自卷的旱烟。而当每次呛得满脸通红时，便急急地招我给他捶背。那场景重复了几年。而我印象中染红老屋门口的那一抹残阳，落了又起，起了又落。不经意中，爷爷便没了。老屋的那扇门吱呀吱呀地在风中摇曳，担摇出的只是一阵又一阵凄凉的心痛，终究，没了坐在老屋门口的人了。 后来迁了新居，奶奶却执意要呆在那所老房子里。她也不解释，只是如爷爷一样沉默地坐着，大家违拗不了她。但稍稍懂事的我想，这老屋的门，承载了太多太多。放学回家，我喜欢伏在老屋门口的小板凳上写作业，一来那儿安静，二来也可与奶奶做伴。奶奶喜欢唠叨，唠叨那些我好奇的往事。偶尔也有三三两两的老婆婆们聚在老屋的门口，谈着那些谁会先入土的事情，平平常常地，如同拉家常一样。但我偶尔也会听到奶奶一个人埋怨，埋怨那个糟老头子去得太早。那时候不知是奶奶倚着门，还是门倚着奶奶。孤零零地，我噙着泪，听着她呜咽，却哭不出声。 时间久了，老屋也成了摇摇欲坠的危房。村里的人劝爸爸把屋拆了，我没肯，当然，爸爸也执意没有答应。记得他同我一起走到老屋那挂锁的门口，听他喃喃地说:“等我老了，还住在这屋里。”我想我是懂的:爷爷奶奶都在这里去了，爸料想是在这门口看到了他们的身影;而人近中年，也想到了自己的归宿。那时候，我天真地应了一句 :“爸，等我老了，也住在这屋里。”爸没吱声，摸了摸那扇小木门，转身便走了。我想他是不愿在老屋的门口哭，怕爷爷奶奶瞧见了伤心。 而如今，我站在老屋的门口，不愿去推开它，因为怕触及那些尘封的往事。但有些事物，如同老屋的门，经历了太多太多，却依旧沉默无语。我不敢撩扰这一份岁月的无声与沧桑，但我想，今天与明天之间，也许也只隔着一扇门，我们都站在岁月的门口徘徊，追忆着那些过往的事与过往的人。 我站在老屋门口，想着那些平常小事。老屋的门，被岁月锁着。 【点评】 这是一篇意境优美、感情丰富、意蕴深远的抒情散文。 作者立足于“老屋”门口，追溯往事，回忆与“老屋”相关的人和事，以时间为序，用疏淡的写意笔法，再现了爷爷门前抽烟、奶奶倚门静思默想、爸爸坚守老屋以及我伫立门口感叹岁月的典型场景。画面虽为平常人事、琐碎家常，但寻常中显奇崛、疏淡中见真情。这里既有物是人非、岁月沧桑的沉重感叹，也有血脉相承、追宗怀远的幽邃情思，可谓情景交融。 vision vision2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development -g, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5ral and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturincultu ng the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative,roups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River alo17 g characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists ofarea layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own mpactrivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively co decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in threeup a ith natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, w belt open development. Spatial structure of-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul10 本文感怀人生，起于“老屋的门口”，立象尽意，随着感受与体验的渐次深入，归结于"岁月的门口"，意蕴深远。点评:戴方文 例六 站在车站的门口 车站，一个不断上演着离别与欢聚的舞台。这幕离别与欢聚之戏的主人翁总是在不断的变化，不变的是，这是同一个站台。 戏剧的主人翁在变，有一天，我就成了这部戏里的主角。一个春寒料峭的日子，一个满是喜气和生机的季节，同时，在我眼里，又是一个失意的季节。一天，爸妈一大早就起床忙里忙外地收拾东西。还处在梦乡与现实的过渡地带的我，忽然依稀听到了一丝啜泣。我睁开朦胧睡眼，发现在昏暗灯光下亲爱的母亲的脸，挂着一些泪水，写着一脸忧伤。我爬到母亲怀里，问她怎么了，她没有说话。倒是一向沉默少言的父亲开口了:我们今天要到外省去打工，一年可能才回一次……我当时就哭了，因为不想爸妈离开。但是这些都于事无补。奶奶拉着满脸泪痕的我，站在车站的门口，和妈妈、爸爸道别。然后便目送他们踏上汽车。汽车缓缓启动，渐渐地成了点，渐渐地消失在大雾的清晨，只留下泣不成声的我和奶奶站在车站的门口……从此，车站便停留在了我的记忆里。我时不时的会站在车站的门口，愿远去的车能带去我对母亲父亲的祝福，愿回来的车能为我捎来父亲母亲的音讯。我会站在车站的门口，继续着我离别与期待欢聚的车站之戏。 叶子绿了又黄，黄了就掉，掉了之后又长。这个世界一直在变，而站台的戏却没变，它依然在上演着。变了的，依然只是主人翁。 十多年前送别的我成了如今远去的人，十多年前远去的父母成了如今送别的人。每一次返校的清晨，母亲总是会像当年远去一样的早早起床，为我收拾行李，为我准备早餐，一切完毕后便送我到车站，来继续这部没有结局的戏。千叮咛万嘱咐:好好学习，注意身体，多吃饭，少喝冷水……总有说不完道不尽的“唠叨”，一种让人心田温暖的唠叨。车走了，透过窗，虽然外面光线暗，但我却分明看到了母亲眼里的不舍，以及泪汪汪的眼眶。离去了，便是无限的不舍与怀念;待到归来时，眼中是一种欣喜若狂的兴奋。但眼睛不管是在离去还是归来时总是湿湿的。 站在车站的门口，祝愿远去的人一路平安;站在车站的门口，等待思念的人平安归来。我的心里有一个车站，一个不断上演离别与欢聚的车站。我会一直站在车站的门口，去送别，去祝福，去等待，去欢聚。 例七;站在老家门口 不经意就走到了老家门口，岁月斑白了门上的门神壁纸，消褪了朱红色的门漆，朽蚀了高悬的门檐。叩门的手停在半空，不知该进还是走开。一路的疑问一一跳出，儿时的画面纷至沓来。 我们的胡同院还在吗,那棵高大的槐树还在等着我放学回家吧～那古墙焦急地等着我的情书吧～我闭上眼。 2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision-res and modern industry. 2.5and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other featuearch the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative reses gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to featureter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern t consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimistricnt along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each dpatterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on developmeent green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized developm city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul11 “吱呀”一声响，门开了，跨过高高的门槛，踏入，随即悬空，像掉入了一个古老悠远的梦境里，那“吱呀”的声音像一首从远古传来的歌谣。 手指轻轻叩响古墙，发出“梆梆”的声响，如同钢琴键那样钝厚温柔的声响，古墙斑驳的脸上青苔掠过，平添了些许皱纹。我不在的时候，古墙就是借青苔的手为我一笔一画写下思念的文字。记得童年时候的我，笑声溅湿了你的脸，槐花瓣儿簌簌落下，淡黄色的花蕊落地，我总爱捡起贴在你苍老的脸上。 转身拐入小院，古槐还在，恍惚间看见奶奶依然安详地在树下纳着鞋底，总感觉奶奶的鞋底沾了槐花的香味，总爱穿着不肯脱下。恍惚间看见母亲在屋内张望，该是在想今儿贪玩的娃又忘了回家吧～看见父亲弯着腰，将水桶放进水井，担起满满的一个月亮，然后有节奏地担进家门，该是那月儿也进了我家门儿了吧～恍惚间看到我自己放学后的雨天，穿着凉鞋跳跃在石板道上，一步两步…… 后来，一纸封条贴住了我向里张望的眼睛，村子里传言上级发命令要整治村容，将老院改成商业街。 那时奶奶慌了，满院里转，却不讲话，如同枝柯间找不着旧日里做窠的老燕，在枝柯间翻飞。孤独惆怅。 那时孩子们也慌了，低头走过，恍惚传来昔日的笑声，他们再也吃不到古园里糖艺老人做的糖小鸟了。再也吃不到槐花糕了吧。 再后来一切都变了，古镇如同一个抹脂粉的老妇人，在时代T台上走秀，却让人惊喜不起来。我流泪了，古院也流泪了，那条穿过院子的小河涨得飞快，那奔流的不是水，而是古院的眼泪吧～一滴两滴…… 肆虐的笑声传过来，惊醒了我的梦，我还站在原地，站在老家门口，舍不得进，更是不忍进，害怕进。如同怕看旧照片里的初恋情人。 古墙还在吗，胡同院里的老槐树还在吗,纷纷的淡黄色落蕊还在吗, 算了吧，都算了吧，走吧，走吧，就将所有的儿时记忆酿成一杯酒，饮下它，永远陶醉在和谐美好的图画中;将一切美好的现实酿成槐花糕，藏在记忆深处，默默的默默的……在蓦然回首的刹那，留下簌簌的淡黄色花影…… 转身，回首。 然后掉头，默默走开，眼泪成诗。 【点评】 本文作者用饱蘸深情的笔墨，生动地再现了小院昔日的人事与今日的变迁。观察细致，文笔细腻，感情真挚，一切景语皆情语。恰当运用排比、比喻修辞手法， 2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development -g, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5ral and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturincultu ng the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative,roups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River alo17 g characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists ofarea layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own mpactrivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively co decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in threeup a ith natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, w belt open development. Spatial structure of-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mulvision vision12 语言富于感染力。文章主体部分似梦非梦，亦虚亦实，空间转换、时间推移、层次井然。用“眼泪成诗”作结，意在点明“回忆总是美”。 由于年龄、常识等原因，文中也有瑕疵，说奶奶“如同枝柯间找不着旧日里做窠的老燕”就不准确。点评:严育开 例八;站在项脊轩的门口 我爱项脊轩，更爱站在项脊轩的门口。 爱她那明月下的半墙，爱她那三五之夜的静谧，爱她的窄小且简朴。 每每翻开那充满书香的语文书，扑入眼帘的就是一座低矮但给人心灵以踏实的小轩。这里安居着追求安然、静然的震川先生，这里绽放着一颗泰然、悠然的灵魂。站在项脊轩的门口，我的心也已被这安谧的气息所陶冶，我的浮躁也俨然已经荡然无存。所以我只敢站在项脊小轩的门口，仰望那不高但又很高的他，注视着这里的一切一切，聆听着大自然为之演奏的音乐。 站在项脊轩的门口，想着那借书满架的场景，听着那偃仰啸歌的狂狷，感受着那种被书拥挤着的幸福感，然后回忆着那充满淡淡忧郁但又美好甜蜜的过去，回忆着父母朋友同学老师甜甜的微笑，沉浸在那种人人有之但又逐渐遗忘的回忆的幸福之中～然后轻轻地哭泣，又轻轻地微笑～ 站在项脊轩的门口，想着冥然兀坐的神情，在那寂寂的庭阶前，学喂食的少女，捋下袖子，挥手洒出谷子，引来那人至不去的小鸟。然后站在那里静静地看着，注视着，融入这片静谧但又有着跳动旋律的院色之中，等待那淡了、暗了的暮霭，等待夕阳西下，庭前花开花落的那一瞬。然后脑中浮现小鸟珊珊可爱的神情，学着小鸟在跳动的旋律中享受这份来自大自然的和谐。 也怪不得震川先生独自钟爱这破落但亦可久居的小轩，也怪不得震川先生可以在庭前在明月下想起那绵绵的爱那天长地久的感动，也怪不得震川先生有如此细腻的心灵写出如此细腻的文章。这份钟爱、这份感动、这份细腻来自那甜美的回忆，来自那大自然的和谐，来自心中的那份安然，悠然～ 站在项脊轩的门口，看着那渐高的月儿，看着那在月色中朦胧依稀的小轩，想起李乐薇的空中楼阁，想起朱自清的荷塘月色，这又何尝不是我的心灵深处所追求的空中之阁，又何尝不是我冥冥之中享受的荷塘月色。这份静谧，这份和谐～ 站在项脊轩的门口，站在回忆的转轴上，站在大自然的琴弦上，站在自我心灵的钟磬旁～ 2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision-res and modern industry. 2.5and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other featuearch the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative reses gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to featureter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern t consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimistricnt along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each dpatterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on developmeent green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized developm city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul13 【点评】 文学艺术作品魅力无穷，它可以滋养人的身心，牵扯人的灵魂。孔老夫子听韶乐，三月不知肉味;青年学子品美文，心灵为之感动，情操为之陶冶，想象为之激发，还被它成就了考场美文一篇，这不正是阅读所追求的理想境界吗,对于抱怨缺乏直接生活感受的中学生来说，合理利用阅读得来的间接生活为文，不也是路径之一吗,点评:胡茂良 (荆楚网-楚天都市报 朱玲) 青春是一串风铃，我看见它挂在十八岁的门口，随着风儿叮当作响，朝我招着手。我知道跨过这道门，我就要向青涩的少年作别了，迈向属于我的成熟人生。 例九;站在十八岁的门口 青春是一串风铃，我看见它挂在十八岁的门口，随着风儿叮当作响，朝我招着手。我知道跨过这道门，我就要向青涩的少年作别了，迈向属于我的成熟人生。 我的生日恰好在七月，跨过高考去迎接十八岁的生日应该别有一番滋味吧，因为经历了十多年学习的生涯再加上高考的洗礼，这份成年礼更显沉稳和智慧。 站在十八岁的门口，朝后回望，那是一段十八载精彩的人生。我收获了亲情，那儿有我从咿呀学语到蹒跚学步再到独立思考时，父母对我无微不至的呵护与谆谆的教导。我收获了友情，从儿时打闹的玩伴到同窗学习的挚友，他们无邪的笑容与无数次和我的共勉在我的心底永远留下了温存的回忆。我收获了知识，十八年来，我像如饥似渴的鱼儿在知识的海洋里游来游去，文学名著，给我以智慧的启迪，给我以前进的动力，它们是滋润干涸心田的雨露，它们是孤苦绝望时的良师益友;自然科学，让我更真切感受到了世界的奇妙与美丽，激发着我探索世界的渴望。我收获了民族自豪感，作为黄皮肤的中国人，我欣喜地见证着祖国的进步与光荣，我高兴自己能与这样的民族同行～ 感谢十八岁的人生让我感受着世界的真善美，让我更明确自己的理想与人生的奋斗目标～ 站在十八岁的门口，我看着那串美丽的风铃，告诉自己:挥手告别那充满酸甜苦辣的过去吧～现在，我要鼓起勇气准备驶向人生的下一个航程。 也许和所有即将或刚成年的朋友一样，我的心中充满了怀念、彷徨和希冀，那是一份真实腼腆的萌动，那是一种想要操纵人生的激情与渴望～ cultu ng the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative,roups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River alo17 g characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists ofarea layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own mpactrivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively co decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in threeup a ith natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, w belt open development. Spatial structure of-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mulvision vision2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development -g, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5ral and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturin14 站在十八岁的门口，翘首展望，那将是充满未知的旅程。未知的成功，未知的失败，未知的喜悦，未知的烦恼，我会彷徨失措吗,会被困难压倒吗,哦，抬头一看，那是父母肯定的目光，那是朋友亲切的挥手，那是师长美丽的微笑。哦，还有我身边的中国人，永远坚强不屈的中国人，和他们为伍，我一定不会害怕，和他们结伴前行，传承五千年炎黄子孙的辛勤与智慧，我想，我一定可以。 站在十八岁的门口，望向人生的大海，我想: 把帆留给风， 把桨留给浪， 把船长的位置留给我～ 【点评】 本文亮点颇多。如扣题紧:回顾既往，面对现实，展望未来，抒情散文表达形式的选择，给了作者展现才气的平台，让我们在“十八岁的门口”，见到了他的青春风采，才情理想。如感情充沛:由生活到学习到思考到觉悟，由少年到青年到成年，由个人到时代到家国，都情寄其间，感奋动人。如形象:情理寓于叙事，哲思寄寓意象，如“风铃”如“大海”，如“帆”与“风”“桨”与“浪”，如“船长”。能在那种考试氛围中写出这样的文章，难能可贵。点评:王德先 , 例十; 荆楚网消息 (楚天都市报) 记者昨采访高考阅卷情况时，多位作文阅卷老师一致介绍，一篇名为《站在黄花岗陵园的门口》的古体长诗(全文附后)，被他们评为今年高考语文“最牛满分作文”。 该作文共1080字(含标点符号)，文首是一段170多字的文言文，介绍了该诗歌的写作背景——2008年作者参观黄花岗七十二烈士陵园，“百感并至，赋诗一首。”诗歌共51行102句，每句七言;后记约70字，也是文言文写作。 “形式和内容表现上都堪称一流。”武汉某省级示范高中阅卷老师介绍，该作文采用古诗词的形式，虽然是采用的历史题材，但表达了敬仰、向上的感情，内容并不空洞。另 2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision-res and modern industry. 2.5and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other featuearch the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative reses gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to featureter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern t consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimistricnt along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each dpatterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on developmeent green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized developm city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul15 一位老师表示，作为中学生，能选择这种文体写作，并运用得比较成熟，说明这名学生读了很多书，有一定的古典文学功底。 —————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————— 《站在黄花岗陵园的门口》 清宣统三年三月二十九日(西元一九一一年四月二十七日)，广州起义暴发。起义之军百二十人持枪械攻入广州督府衙门，两广总督张鸣歧闻风而逃。然义军终因寡不敌众，数百清军围之，起义军多战死。旋革命党人潘达微见而怜之，收烈士之骸，止得七十二具，葬于白云山麓之黄花岗。九十七年之后，时值腊月，会天大雪，余滞于广州，遂至黄花岗七十二烈士之陵。止于其门，百感并至，赋诗一首，诗曰: 赤焰难明赤县天，百年群魔舞翩跹。国土已破何人见，金瓯早缺有谁怜, 皇祚不复天威去，天朝迷梦化为烟。五口通商香港失，断鸿声中夷舰现。 圆明园中尽烈火，太和殿里无君颜。水师已覆巨舰沉，黄海之水腥且咸。 春帆楼上条约订，马关之约逆臣签。大沽台上炮声隆，将士陈尸国门前。 新鬼啾啾旧鬼哭，京洼难日见炊烟。宣战诏书何处寻,言说帝后西秋狝。 辛丑条约庚子恨，落日秋风哭宝剑。六十年来伤国步，八千里外吊民残。 空向长河咒逝川，不尽国愁在斯年。四万万人齐下泪，天涯何处是神州, 民穷国敝割土地，偿银赔款年复年。可怜越女夜夜哭，半国殖民半封建。 檀香山上聚义士，兴中会中复青天。烈火已燃锤与镰，今将炮火灭清廷。 枪声惊破五羊城，英雄无惧挥宝剑。提携玉泉为国死，何得英名在人间。 悲歌一曲从天落，壮士不再歌易水。晓见江山有炊烟，烈士之魂已沉泉。 人生百年能几何，荒草斜阳土坯间。白云片片魂悠悠，黄花遍野使人愁。 义军已覆化碧土，留得精神载史书。黄花岗上土一抔，埋没荒烟蔓草间。 g, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5ral and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturincultu ng the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative,roups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River alo17 g characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists ofarea layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own mpactrivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively co decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in threeup a ith natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, w belt open development. Spatial structure of-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mulvision vision2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development -16 起事何知一死难，的卢青骢劳鞍鞯。青天白日满地红，镶开碑上覆墓间。 行人往往悲旧事，含愤长忆孙逸仙。无量头颅无量血，可怜换得假共和。 皇冠已覆君前落，不见人间少帝制。百越之人总不忘，秋风秋雨湿黄花。 愁看长江东逝去，却有青史映君前。莫悲往事愤钩沉，但看祖国焕新颜。 沧桑浮沉忆浮生，吾辈发奋应向前。岁月如潮歌似梦，百年弹指一挥间。 红尘梦里忆壮举，烈士陵前有愧颜。吾侪不曾历战火，无复见此漫硝烟。 和平岁月忆往事，史海沧茫不亲见。今春南岭雪满天，雪映梅花忠魂骨。 碧血横飞四塞惊，草木含情风云悲。只因烈士血如海，才使日月换新天。 英雄何只黄花岗，无数忠魂红旗间。百兆国子怀先辈，万里江山动后人。 召公甘为社稷死，感君总能多奉献。至今天下传英名，不使君没蔓草间。 今之河山多锦绣，不复沉沦如从前。工厂遍地多铁马，信息时代在眼前。 民众康乐少悲苦，难以再见愁容颜。吾今立于陵门口，思绪纷飞感万千。 聊诌一诗悼君魂，勿怪字拙人不见。 后记:今日之生活，皆先辈流血而成，今中国多烈士之陵，何止黄花岗耶,然吾平生只至黄花岗，愧矣。今年之秋，料黄花岗之黄花，应于秋风之中透香中华乎, 例十;站在家的门口 每当夜幕降临，披着满天星斗，踏着清幽的月光回到那熟悉的家门口时，迎接我的，永远是那一抹从窗口透出的橘色的灯光。 严寒酷暑、暮春清秋，无论我归家的时间多晚，哪怕已经过了子夜，那窗口的灯从未熄灭，父母总不忘在临睡前留下那盏灯光。年少轻狂的我，从未想过那盏灯光的意义，心安理得地借着灯光开门，在锅里找出依然温热的饭菜，匆匆吃完，匆匆入睡，第二天沐着朝霞早早离去，甚至等不及向父母道一声早安。印象里，那些年，除了逢年过节，我甚至没有在家里见过母亲的面，只是偶尔同早起的父亲擦肩而过。我们各自忙着各自的工作、学业，也许是太忙了，也许是所谓的代 res and modern industry. 2.5and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other featuearch the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative reses gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to featureter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern t consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimistricnt along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each dpatterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on developmeent green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized developm city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision-17 沟，我和父母几乎没有什么交流，只有透过家门口窗户的那盏灯每到入夜便一如既往的点亮。 直到有一天，母亲突然病倒了，不久，永远离开了我们，父亲便离开喧嚣的城市把自己放逐到郊外与牛做伴。 从那时起，我再也没有在家门口看到那抹熟悉的灯光。每天，拖着疲惫的身子回到家，家的窗户漆黑一片，摸索着打开大门，除了月光洒在窗台上的清冷，再无一丝温馨。 若干年后的某天，站在夜幕低垂，灯火辉煌的街头，看着马路上匆匆归家的人潮，突然间没由来地一阵心慌，那千家万户透过窗口的灯光，竟没有一盏是为我点燃，刹那间，失去了方向，夹杂在拥挤的人流中，那份仓惶与失落，无法用言语来形容，仿佛多年来所有的努力与拼搏，一下子变得毫无意义。失去了灯塔指引的船儿，只能在无边的汪洋中漂泊，不知道将去向何方，更不知这般忙碌为了什么。 总以为父母无法理解儿女的心，总以为与他们隔了座山，总以为他们的谆谆絮叨是斩不断的风筝线让自己无法高飞，总以为自己长大了不再需要他们……直到那一刻，才突然醒悟，原来家门口那盏永不熄灭的灯，就是他们的心，是他们无声的语言，是他们用爱点燃的路标，指引你归航的方向。 时至今日，那盏灯悄悄依然点亮在我心中最深的角落，每次回到老宅，站在门口，尘封的记忆便如甘泉流淌过心田，让我在钢筋水泥的城市中，能找到一个休憩的港湾。 例十一 站在梦想的门口 曾经梦想过一件事吗,某天，你突然冒出一个念头，从那以后，它便在你脑海中生根发芽，再也没有消失。在你眼中，它们是那么的灿烂，那么的闪闪发光。你曾经天真的相信，也曾经痛苦的绝望。但无论你听到什么看到什么，你却从来没有忘记过它，也从没有心甘情愿地放弃过。 我的梦想是成为一个厉害的吉他手。 这个暑假，学校的几个同学组成了一个乐队，我成为了这个乐队的吉他手。我们怀着兴奋的心情开始了排练。乐队的排练要比我们想象中的难得多。一开始，我们总是配合得不好，我还常常弹错，弹我们每一个人都在努力，也在不停地互相鼓励着。当我们第一次把那首《恋爱ing》从头到尾成功地合一遍之后，我们每一个人都在开心地鼓掌，欢呼。 排练一天天地进行着，我们的集体也在每一个人的努力中进步着。虽然我们的技术并不高超，我们的配合并不完美，我们甚至还没有一个听众，但那每一个音符都凝聚了我们认真的思考和努力的练习。我从未这样接近过我的梦想，此刻的我应该是快乐的。 就这样，从假期到开学，从医院的会议室到学校的艺体中心，我们一直在努力。在学校，我们常常利用午饭的时间去排练。对我们来说，这并不辛苦，因为我们都有一个共同的期待，期待在学校的艺术节上带给同学们一场精彩的演出。 cultu ng the river continues to the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative,roups. Band: modern features gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River alo17 g characteristics and perimeter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists ofarea layout, each district consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own mpactrivers based on development along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively co decentralized development patterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in threeup a ith natural landscapes and green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set 2, the prominent cultural city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, w belt open development. Spatial structure of-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mulvision vision2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development -g, liquor, and other features and modern industry. 2.5ral and creative research and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturin18 然而现实总是很残酷，今年的艺术节取消了，我们的乐队便失去了演出的机会。虽然我们谁都没有说出来，但我们明白，每个人心里都会有些遗憾，有些沮丧。我们互相安慰着说以后还会有机会的，但那又会是什么时候呢, 我曾为我的未来设想过无数种可能，我也曾想到我以后会组建一个乐队，和几个同样热爱音乐的朋友一起实现我们的梦想，但我从未想过，这个故事会开始得这么快，我更没有想到，它结束得这么让人措手不及。就好像我在一条路上走着，突然，前面出现了一扇门，我看见那是我的梦想，但我刚刚接近那扇门，它却突然地关上了。 我曾想过，梦想不一定非要实现，能尽力地为它奋斗或许也是一种幸福。但现在我明白了，奋斗这个词或许简单，现实中却背负了太多的无奈。朋友们说得对，或许以后还会有很多机会，但再美的梦想也总会有一个终点。人生是一条茫茫的长路，但梦想，或许只是一间温暖的小屋，它能给我们快乐，但人终究不能只是活在梦想里。 好了，路还有很长，我不能总是在一扇门口徘徊，我想，我要说声再见了，或许以后还会再见，那时我依然会全力地去奋斗。即使不会再见，我也已经收获了很多，有真诚的朋友，有灿烂的回忆，更重要的是，我收获了一份面对未来的勇气，无论如何，在这条路上，我会记得，我路过那扇门，我在那里驻足过，眺望过。 我曾经是一个吉他手，我见过我的梦想。 2 spatial planning figure 2.6 in Yibin city, Central City urban development vision vision-res and modern industry. 2.5and development in science and education function of modern service and port equipment manufacturing, liquor, and other featuearch the East to South stream groups, layout along the city's main commercial, business, administrative, cultural and creative reses gathering along the Yangtze River belt. Dvn group in the upper reaches of the jinsha River along the river continues to featureter formation Li Zhuang, Li Zhuangdong characteristic tour area and Hong Kong in group, consists of 17 groups. Band: modern t consists of multiple groups, and the area has both integrated urban functions, and have their own characteristics and perimistricnt along the Yangtze River, city on the River, River in the city. Multiple groups: the relatively compact area layout, each dpatterns, building ... Three rivers: the Yangtze, jinsha River and minjiang rivers, cities in three rivers based on developmeent green for the background, according to the combined city, urban Group organization structure, set up a decentralized developm city protection elements on the development of the whole city and culture series supporting role, with natural landscapes and belt open development. Spatial structure of 2, the prominent cultural-tiple groups from a single radiationintensive development. (5) have different emphasis: for development, "with development, the emphasis on" way, from space, mul19