Score Explanation
This outstanding essay insightfully and effectively develops the point of view
that “what may look like success to one person may spell disaster for
others.” The writer demonstrates outstanding critical thinking by presenting a
well-organized series of clearly appropriate and detailed examples describing
situation in which one person’s perception of success has been disastrous for
others. The essay begins with the insightful idea that, despite being given
“the happy, sunny ‘I think I can’ version” of success as children, adults
mature and inevitably realize the “slightly darker side to success.” From
here, the essay smoothly moves through an example of the ruthlessness
necessary to achieve the position of CEO to a discussion of the idea that,
since Adolf Hitler’s “idea of success was the complete eradication of Jewish
people from Germany” his “triumph” was “another man’s demise.” The essay
continues to demonstrate outstanding critical thinking by explaining that
while many view Franklin Delano Roosevelt as a “a great president” for
setting “into motion a whole series of new political programs,” flaws in the
programs have left the country “picking up the pieces of successful
mistakes.” Finally, the essay describes how the technological and scientific
success of cloning “spells disaster for religious and ethical groups, who find
this scientific breakthrough to be immoral and unnatural.” By stating that
“nothing comes without a price,” the essay concludes its clearly focused
development, demonstrating a clear overall coherence and smooth
progression of ideas. Throughout, the essay consistently exhibits skillful use
of language and demonstrates meaningful variety in a sentence structure
(“For many people the word ‘success’ brings to mind images of wealthy
upper class, white collar CEO’s and presidents of companies. This is a slightly
sheltered American capitalistic view. Success for other people can mean
completing a college education, winning and Olympic medal or learning
another language”). This essay demonstrates clear and consistent mastery,
meriting the highest score of 6.
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